列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is a bit long and repetitive. Try to make your response more concise and avoid repeating phrases. Also, use linking words to make your answer flow better. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then add supporting details with connectors like 'because' or 'so'.

示例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list on my phone's notes app because it helps me remember everything I need. This way, I can quickly check the list while shopping and avoid forgetting items.

建议: Your answer is clear but can be improved by linking your ideas more smoothly and avoiding awkward phrasing. Use linking words like 'because' and 'therefore' to connect your sentences logically. Also, try to be more concise and avoid unnecessary words.

示例: I don't usually make lists for work because, as a dentist, I handle cases as they come. Therefore, there is no need to prepare a list in advance.

建议: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by using more precise vocabulary and linking words. Avoid starting sentences with 'like' in formal speaking. Also, try to give a more specific reason or example to support your opinion.

示例: Some people dislike making lists because they prefer to rely on their memory. For instance, they might find it easier to remember tasks mentally rather than writing them down.

建议: Your answer has some repetition and unclear phrases. Try to be more concise and clear. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' properly to connect your ideas. Also, avoid mistakes like 'I prefer fun' which seems to be a typo or unclear.

示例: I prefer making lists on my phone because the notes app allows me to organize items with bullet points. This makes it easy to review my list without carrying any paper when I go out.

× When there are multiple things need to be remembered when we when I go out for shopping, then I usually list out the things, particularly in my phone itself in the notes tab so that I could just get a quick review of the things once I went to once I go for shopping.

✓ When there are multiple things that need to be remembered when I go out for shopping, then I usually list out the things, particularly in my phone itself in the notes tab so that I can just get a quick review of the things once I go for shopping.

The sentence has a present tense issue where 'need' should be 'that need' to correctly connect the clause. Also, 'could' is changed to 'can' to match the present tense context. The phrase 'once I went to once I go' is corrected to 'once I go' to maintain present tense consistency.

× When there are multiple things need to be remembered when we when I go out for shopping, then I usually list out the things, particularly in my phone itself in the notes tab so that I could just get a quick review of the things once I went to once I go for shopping.

✓ When there are multiple things that need to be remembered when I go out for shopping, I usually list them, particularly in the notes tab on my phone, so that I can quickly review the list when I go shopping.

The original sentence is long and repetitive, causing confusion. Simplifying and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and flow, which is important for effective communication.

× Since I'm working in the field of dentistry, I have to deal with cases that are presented before me at the due time only.

✓ Since I work in the field of dentistry, I have to deal with cases that are presented to me only at the due time.

The phrase 'I'm working' is changed to 'I work' to express a habitual action rather than a temporary one. Also, 'presented before me' is corrected to 'presented to me' for proper preposition use.

× Since I'm working in the field of dentistry, I have to deal with cases that are presented before me at the due time only.

✓ Since I work in the field of dentistry, I have to deal with cases that are presented to me only at the due time.

The preposition 'before' is incorrectly used; the correct preposition is 'to' when referring to cases being presented to someone.

× I think that some people just have the habit of doing the things in their own way. Like they may remember things in their mind itself.

✓ I think that some people just have the habit of doing things their own way. They may remember things in their mind itself.

The phrase 'doing the things' is corrected to 'doing things' for natural usage. Also, 'in their mind itself' is acceptable but could be improved; however, it is retained as it fits the context.

× I prefer to make my list of things on my phone itself because I have a notes app and my phone and that really helps to create a list with specified bullet points and it is easy to review also so I am not carrying any paper with me when I go go out.

✓ I prefer to make my list of things on my phone itself because I have a notes app on my phone, and that really helps me create a list with specified bullet points. It is also easy to review, so I do not carry any paper with me when I go out.

The sentence has redundancy and awkward phrasing. 'And my phone' is repeated unnecessarily. The sentence is split for clarity and corrected for smoother flow.

× So I prefer fun.

✓ So I prefer my phone.

The word 'fun' is a typographical error and should be 'phone' to make sense in the context.