列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and use correct verb forms. Add one specific supporting detail and a linking word. For example, correct subject-verb agreement and remove repeated phrases.

示例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list because I shop once a week and need to remember everything. For example, I group items by category—produce, dairy and pantry—so I shop faster and stick to my grocery budget.

建议: Use past or present simple consistently and give a clear example with linking words. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then explain how the list helps with priorities and time management, and finish with a specific example in one or two concise sentences.

示例: Yes, I make a work list every day because it helps me prioritise tasks and manage my time. For example, I plan meetings in the morning, schedule time to reply to emails, and list project deadlines so I can finish the most important tasks first.

建议: Correct repetition, pronoun agreement and use linking words to connect reason and example. Provide one clear reason and a supporting specific example; avoid vague phrasing.

示例: Some people dislike making lists because they find the process time-consuming and tedious. For example, professionals with good memories often prefer to remember tasks mentally rather than spend time writing them down.

建议: Fix grammar and unclear phrases, use a clear topic sentence and one specific example with linking words. Explain why the phone is convenient and give a concise, coherent example of how you use it.

示例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it is more convenient and saves time. For example, when I commute by train I add items to a shopping note which syncs with my calendar and reminders, so I won't forget them.

× Making a list help me to avoid helps me for avoid forgetting things and also keep me on budget especially for groceries.

✓ Making a list helps me to avoid forgetting things and also keeps me on budget, especially for groceries.

The sentence contains issues with verb forms and agreement. 'Making a list' as a subject requires the singular verb 'helps'. The verb after 'avoid' should be in the -ing form: 'avoid forgetting'. Also 'keeps' must agree with the singular subject 'Making a list'. Remove redundant words 'help me to' and 'helps me for avoid' and add a comma before the phrase 'especially for groceries' for clarity.

× I will make a list for my work because it helps me to prioritize my work throughout and manage time throughout the day.

✓ I make a list for my work because it helps me prioritize tasks and manage my time during the day.

The original used 'will make' which suggests a future action but the context describes a habitual action, so present simple 'make' is appropriate. Also simplify 'helps me to prioritize my work throughout and manage time throughout the day' to 'helps me prioritize tasks and manage my time during the day' for natural phrasing and clarity.

× For example, a meeting in the morning, take off emails and finished projects which made.

✓ For example, I have meetings in the morning, respond to emails, and finish projects.

The original fragment lacks a proper verb structure and mixes tenses ('take off emails' and 'finished projects which made'). Recast as a clear list of habitual actions: 'I have meetings,' 'respond to emails,' and 'finish projects.' Use base verbs in parallel form and present simple for habitual actions.

× I think some people don't like making this because they find find it's very time consuming, tedious.

✓ I think some people don't like making lists because they find them very time-consuming and tedious.

'This' is not the correct pronoun to refer to 'making lists'; use 'lists' or 'them'. Also 'find find' is a duplication. 'Time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming' when used as a compound adjective. Use plural pronoun 'them' to match 'lists.'

× For example, some people would memorize everything inside his head instead of writing everything down in the calendar.

✓ For example, some people would memorize everything in their heads instead of writing everything down in a calendar.

Pronoun 'his' incorrectly assumes gender and does not agree with the plural subject 'some people.' Use the gender-neutral plural pronoun 'their.' Also 'inside his head' is better phrased as 'in their heads,' and 'the calendar' changed to 'a calendar' for generality.

× I prefer making list on my phone because it's more convenient and time saving.

✓ I prefer making lists on my phone because it's more convenient and time-saving.

Use plural 'lists' to match habitual action. Preposition 'on' is correct for phone but ensure 'making lists on my phone' is used. 'Time saving' should be hyphenated as 'time-saving' when used as an adjective.

× For example when I come mute by train, I often drop down task in shopping items so they sync with my calendar so I don't forget.

✓ For example, when I commute by train, I often add shopping items to a task list so they sync with my calendar and I don't forget.

'Come mute by train' is incorrect; the intended word is 'commute.' 'Drop down task in shopping items' is unclear; use 'add shopping items to a task list.' Use parallel conjunctions 'so they sync with my calendar and I don't forget.' Also include commas for clarity and correct article use 'a task list.'