列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答要更清晰、逻辑更连贯，并纠正语法错误。可先给出主题句（我会列购物清单），然后说明两个具体原因，用连接词（because / so / therefore）衔接，避免重复和填充词（uh, um）。例如将“awarding”改为“aware”或更自然表达“make sure I don’t forget important things”。注意时态和动词短语（go to the mall again，去掉多余的“to”）。

示例: Yes, I usually make a shopping list because it helps me remember important items and avoids extra trips to the mall. For example, last week I planned my groceries in advance, so I finished shopping quickly and saved time.

建议: 回答需更有条理并使用正确词汇。先给出简洁的主题句（我会列工作清单并且有效），然后列举一到两个具体例子说明如何帮助你完成任务。避免重复词（finish finish）和错误词汇（employments应为 tasks 或 jobs）。使用连接词（for example, therefore）。

示例: Yes, I make a work list and it works well. For example, I list my tasks for the day and allocate specific time slots, so I can finish my paper and other assignments on time.

建议: 回答应更具体并给出清晰原因和例子。先给出主题句（有些人不喜欢列清单），然后用连接词列出两个原因（they have few tasks; they prefer internal organisation/self-discipline），并给一个简短例子。避免填充词并使用正确短语（少工作用 few tasks/ not many tasks）。

示例: Some people dislike making lists because they don't have many tasks and can remember everything, and others prefer to rely on self-discipline. For example, a colleague of mine never writes lists but still completes all her assignments on time.

建议: 回答要更自然并用准确表达说明原因。先说偏好（paper），然后用连接词给出具体原因（手机会分心），可以举一个具体情境说明。避免重复和口头禅，注意动词形式（prefer writing them）。

示例: I prefer writing lists on paper because my phone distracts me with notifications and apps. For instance, when I tried using a notes app last week I kept checking videos, so paper works much better for staying focused.

× Yes, I do, uh, because I think if I make a list I will a awarding for getting something important.

✓ Yes, I do, uh, because I think if I make a list I will be rewarded for getting something important.

句中缺少被动结构的过去分词/完成形式來构成“be rewarded”（被奖励）。原句用“a awarding”是不正确的名词/动名词形式。建议使用被动语态“will be rewarded”来表达“我会因此得到奖励”。

× Otherwise I will go to the mall again.

✓ Otherwise I will have to go to the mall again.

原句缺少情态或助动结构来表达“不得不/必须”的含义，单说“I will go”虽然语法正确但与前句逻辑不够紧密。使用“will have to”更符合想要表达的“否则我得再去一次”的意思。

× It's so troublesome and I don't have enough time to, uh, go to again.

✓ It's so troublesome and I don't have enough time to go again.

原句中“to go to again”有多余的介词“to”。不定式结构应为“to go again”。删除多余的“to”即可。

× Yes I do because every day I have a lot of employments to do if I and I also a message to write my paper.

✓ Yes, I do because every day I have a lot of tasks to do and I also have messages to write or I need to write papers.

“employments”用法不自然，正确应为“tasks”或“jobs”；句子结构混乱，有重复词和残缺部分（“if I and I also a message”）。需整理并补全谓语。“have messages to write”或“need to write papers”更通顺。建议把句子拆成清晰的并列结构。

× So I must have a time schedule to do a thing so that I can finish finish.

✓ So I must have a schedule so that I can finish my tasks.

原句“a time schedule to do a thing”措辞笨拙且重复“finish finish”。应使用“have a schedule”并明确“tasks”。删除重复并简化表达。

× Maybe they don't have so many work, though it is necessary for them to write it down.

✓ Maybe they don't have so much work, though it is necessary for them to write it down.

“work”作为不可数名词应与“much”连用，不能用“many”。因此应改为“so much work”。

× Apart from that, maybe they can control themselves. So, uh, there is no, uh, list.

✓ Apart from that, maybe they can control themselves, so they don't need a list.

原句“there is no list”结构生硬，且代词指代不明确。用“they don't need a list”更清楚地表达因果关系和主语指代。

× They can also finish their work well.

✓ They can also finish their work well.

该句语法无误，仅为确认。意思清晰，结构正确。无需修改。

× Uh, I would like to write it down on my paper because I can't control myself.

✓ Uh, I would like to write it down on paper because I can't control myself.

“on my paper”虽可理解，但惯用表达是“on paper”或“on a piece of paper”。建议使用更自然的短语“on paper”。

× If I touched my phone, I'll, I, I, I just want to play it and, uh, watch videos or play games.

✓ If I touch my phone, I'll just want to play with it, watch videos or play games.

条件句时态混用：应使用一般现在时“If I touch”与将来结果“I'll”。此外“play it”用法不当，通常说“play with it”。去掉重复的停顿词并调整动词短语。

× So I, I prefer to writing them.

✓ So I prefer writing them.

动词“prefer”后可接动名词或不定式，但结构应为“prefer writing”或“prefer to write”。“prefer to writing”是错误搭配。建议改为“prefer writing them”。