列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammatical accuracy and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail. Correct verb forms and article usage, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" smoothly.

示例: Yes, I sometimes make a shopping list, especially when I host an event. For example, I host Chinese New Year at my home every year, so I make a list of fruits and vegetables because there are many varieties to buy.

建议: Focus on grammatical correctness and clearer structure: give a direct topic sentence, then one or two concise supporting details with linking words. Use correct verb forms and fewer redundant phrases.

示例: No, I don't make a separate work list because I use Google Classroom, which has a built-in To-Do list. Therefore, I can quickly check any missing tasks and it helps me avoid forgetting important work.

建议: Provide a clearer main idea and more specific reasons. Avoid repetition ("personality" and "character") and combine sentences with linking words like "because" and "for example." Keep answers concise and natural.

示例: I think it depends on the person. Some people avoid lists because they feel too busy or think list-making is time-consuming; for example, when someone is overwhelmed they prefer to deal with tasks as they come rather than plan them.

建议: Good structure and relevant details. Improve by correcting minor grammar (use plural where needed) and tightening phrasing. Use a linking phrase to conclude a brief comparison of pros and cons.

示例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it's always with me, so I can quickly check and edit items. Also, on iOS my notes are automatically backed up, which is more reliable than paper that I might lose.

× Yes, I do sometimes make a list when I shop, especially if I'm going to have an event the next day in my house.

✓ Yes, I sometimes make a list when I shop, especially if I'm going to have an event at my house the next day.

Word order and preposition: 'do sometimes make' is grammatical but word order 'I sometimes make a list' is more natural in present simple. Use preposition 'at' for events occurring at a location. Also 'the next day in my house' is awkward; 'at my house the next day' is clearer.

× For example, there is a Chinese New Year celebration that held it at my place every year and for this reason I have to buy fruits, vegetables.

✓ For example, there is a Chinese New Year celebration held at my place every year, and for this reason I have to buy fruits and vegetables.

Incorrect verb form and redundant pronoun: 'that held it' is ungrammatical. Use the past participle 'held' to form a reduced relative clause ('celebration held at my place'). Also include the conjunction comma and 'and' and use 'fruits and vegetables' with 'and' and optionally plural 'fruits' and 'vegetables'.

× There are so many variety of that, that's why.

✓ There is such a wide variety of them, so that's why.

'Variety' as a singular noun takes 'a' or 'such a' and pairs with 'of' plus plural or pronoun; 'so many variety' is incorrect. Use 'such a wide variety' or 'so many varieties' and replace vague 'that' with 'them' or specify items. Also combine with 'so' to connect reason.

× No, I've never make a list for my work since I use Google Classroom on a regular basis and there is To Do List that is already available on the application and in case I left out something I can just check in the missing area.

✓ No, I've never made a list for my work since I use Google Classroom regularly and there is a To Do list already available in the application, so if I leave something out I can just check the missing items there.

Mixed tense and verb form errors: 'I've never make' should be present perfect 'I've never made'. 'in case I left out something' mixes past with present—use present 'if I leave something out'. Use article 'a' for 'a To Do list' and 'in the application' rather than 'on'. Clarify 'check the missing items there'.

× It is really essential though so I can always look up if I have missed something important through the application.

✓ It is really essential because I can always check if I have missed something important through the application.

Stylistic and collocation: 'look up' is used for seeking information (e.g., in a dictionary); use 'check' for reviewing tasks. Use 'because' as a clearer conjunction. Present perfect 'have missed' is correct to refer to past actions with present relevance.

× It depends on the circumstances, personality and the person's character.

✓ It depends on the circumstances, personality, and character of the person.

Redundant phrasing and parallelism: 'personality and the person's character' is repetitive. Use parallel structure and eliminate redundancy: 'personality and character' or 'character of the person'.

× Honestly, in my opinion, this is because if you are really busy or lazy at the moment, you do not really want to add a burden to yourself.

✓ Honestly, in my opinion, this is because if you are really busy or lazy at the moment, you do not want to add a burden to yourself.

Redundancy: 'do not really want' can be simplified to 'do not want' for clarity. Tense and modal use are fine; remove unnecessary adverb 'really' for fluency.

× And making a list is organizing things and it could be time consuming as well.

✓ Making a list is a way of organizing things, and it can be time-consuming as well.

Use noun phrase 'a way of organizing things' rather than verb form alone. Hyphenate 'time-consuming' as a compound adjective and use 'can be' for possibility. This improves grammar and clarity.

× I prefer making list on my phone because it's with me almost all the time so I can quickly check items and edit them.

✓ I prefer making a list on my phone because it's with me almost all the time, so I can quickly check items and edit them.

Missing article: 'making list' needs 'a list'. Add comma before 'so' for clarity. Otherwise tense and pronouns are fine.

× Also my notes are automatically backed up since it's an iOS software which feels more reliable than paper that I could easily lose it or forget it.

✓ Also, my notes are automatically backed up since it's iOS software, which feels more reliable than paper, which I could easily lose or forget.

Pronoun redundancy: do not repeat object pronoun 'it' after 'lose' or 'forget' when referring to 'paper'—use 'lose' or 'forget' without 'it'. 'An iOS software' is awkward; 'iOS software' or 'an iOS app' is better. Use relative clauses correctly: 'which feels more reliable than paper, which I could easily lose or forget.'