列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct, grammatical, and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid filler words and repetition. For example, say whether you usually make a list and give a short reason or an example.

示例: No, I don't always make a list. Usually I just try to remember what I need, but sometimes I write a quick note on my phone when I have many items to buy.

建议: Answer the question directly and use correct grammar. Begin with a clear topic sentence (e.g., I don't have a job), then explain what you do instead and whether it is effective. Use a linking word to connect ideas and give a brief example of how lists help you study.

示例: I don't have a job; I'm a student, so I make lists for my homework instead. For example, I list my assignments each weekend, and this usually helps me prioritize and finish tasks on time.

建议: Provide a clear, logical reason with specific supporting details and avoid unclear vocabulary. Start with a topic sentence answering why some people dislike lists, then give one or two concise reasons using linking words (e.g., because, so). Correct unclear words and keep it short.

示例: Some people dislike making lists because they prefer to rely on memory, so they think lists are unnecessary. Also, some find lists too time-consuming, especially if their plans change often.

建议: Answer directly and use a comparative structure correctly. Begin with your preference, then give a specific reason and a brief example. Use linking words like because or so, and avoid repetition and grammar mistakes.

示例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it's more convenient and I can check it anytime. For example, I keep a shopping list in a notes app, so I don't forget items when I'm at the store.

× Not always, uh, I sometimes I try to Remember Me, remember to myself and that's it.

✓ Not always. Sometimes I try to remind myself, and that's it.

The student used 'Remember Me' and 'remember to myself' incorrectly. The correct verb phrase is 'remind myself' (verb + reflexive pronoun) to indicate causing oneself to remember. Also remove redundant 'I' and fix capitalization and sentence fragments. Suggestion: use 'remind myself' and separate ideas with proper punctuation.

× I am AI am a student, I don't work and I try to list my homework or something to I have to study.

✓ I am a student; I don't work, and I try to list my homework or things I have to study.

The sentence contains awkward and incorrect phrases: 'I am AI am a student' and 'something to I have to study.' Remove the erroneous 'AI' and correct word order to 'things I have to study.' Use a semicolon or commas to join independent clauses. Ensure parallel structure after 'and'.

× Because some people try to remember themselves and some people try to lease and plan for for their lease in.

✓ Because some people try to remember things themselves, and some people try to plan for their lives instead.

'Remember themselves' is awkward; better is 'remember things themselves.' The phrase 'try to lease and plan for for their lease in' is unclear and likely wrong word choice; 'plan for their lives' fits context. Remove duplicate 'for'. Ensure pronouns and nouns match intended meaning.

× It's so important to list your shop.

✓ It's very important to make a shopping list.

'List your shop' is ungrammatical and unclear. The correct expression is 'make a shopping list' or 'list the things to buy.' Use 'very' instead of 'so' for formal clarity and correct word order.

× I think make list in the phone is so better than on the right on the paper paper because you check your phone and you remember that you have to shop this list.

✓ I think making a list on your phone is much better than on paper because you check your phone and remember you have to buy the items on the list.

Use the gerund 'making' after 'think.' 'On your phone' is the correct prepositional phrase; 'on the right on the paper paper' is incorrect and repetitive. 'Shop this list' is incorrect; use 'buy the items on the list.' Also prefer 'much better' to 'so better.' Ensure concise wording and correct verb forms.