列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise, use correct tense, and organise ideas with a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting reasons. Avoid hesitation sounds and repetition. For example, start with a present simple sentence ('Yes, I always make a shopping list') then give one clear reason and a short example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' properly.

示例: Yes, I always make a shopping list before I go shopping because it helps me remember everything I need. For instance, last week the list saved me a second trip to the supermarket when I realized I had written down milk and bread.

建议: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two brief supporting details. Correct simple grammar (use present simple/present continuous correctly) and avoid extra words. Use linking words like 'because' to connect the reason smoothly.

示例: No, I don't usually make a list for work because my colleague gives me a handover at the start of each shift. Therefore, I know my duties and don't need to write notes.

建议: Start with a general statement that directly answers the question, then support it with a reason and brief example. Use correct verb forms and avoid filler words. Use linking phrases like 'for example' or 'for instance' to add clarity.

示例: Some people don't like making lists because they have very good memories and prefer to remember things mentally. For example, my friend rarely writes reminders because she can recall appointments without notes.

建议: Give a direct preference first, then give one clear reason and a short example. Reduce repetition and fix grammar (use contractions carefully and correct word order). Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' effectively.

示例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because I always carry it and can set reminders. For example, I keep a shopping list in a note app and set an alarm so I don't forget urgent items.

× Definitely I made a list when I am going for shopping, uh, because, uh, list or because list, uh, have to remind all the things so I do not have to forget any kind of things.

✓ I usually make a list when I go shopping because the list has to remind me of things so I do not forget anything.

The student mixed past tense 'made' with present continuous 'am going' and used incorrect verb forms and structures. Use simple present for habitual actions: 'I usually make' and 'when I go shopping.' 'List or because list, have to remind all the things' is ungrammatical; correct to 'the list has to remind me of things.' Also replace 'any kind of things' with 'anything.' Suggestion: use consistent tense for habits (simple present) and correct verb agreement ('list has').

× I have could not go again on the particular store for that thing.

✓ I could not go back to that particular store for that item.

This sentence contains incorrect auxiliary verb sequence 'have could not' and wrong preposition 'on' and noun choice 'thing.' For past inability use 'could not.' Use 'go back to a store' and 'item' or 'thing' appropriately. Suggestion: use correct modal past form 'could' and proper prepositions 'back to.'

× Currently I'm working as a security guard and not need to make a list for my work because when I just started my shift I got a pass on from the another guard.

✓ Currently I'm working as a security guard and I do not need to make a list for my work because when I start my shift I get a pass from the other guard.

The student mixed tenses and omitted auxiliary 'do' for negative present. For current routine use simple present: 'I do not need.' Use 'when I start my shift I get a pass' instead of 'just started'/'got' which are past. Also 'a pass on from the another guard' is incorrect; use 'a pass from the other guard.' Suggestion: keep present tense for current routines and include proper auxiliaries and articles.

× So I do not make any kind of notes or any list.

✓ So I do not make any notes or lists.

'Any kind of notes or any list' is wordy and inconsistent in number. Use simple plural 'notes or lists' with present negative 'do not make.' Suggestion: simplify to 'any notes or lists.'

× Because some people have a very good memory, they did not like to make list.

✓ Because some people have very good memories, they do not like to make lists.

The student incorrectly used past 'did not like' while meaning a general habit; use simple present 'do not like.' Also 'a very good memory' should be pluralized 'very good memories' or use 'a very good memory' with singular but then adjust 'they.' Use plural 'lists.' Suggestion: use present tense for general truths and match singular/plural nouns.

× They have very sharp memory, they can easily, uh, remember their things.

✓ They have very sharp memories; they can easily remember their things.

Use plural 'memories' to match 'they.' Comma splice fixed with semicolon or separate sentence. 'Remember their things' is informal but acceptable; could be 'remember their belongings.' Suggestion: match noun number to pronoun and avoid run-on sentences.

× So I usually make a list on my phone because, uh, I carry my phone everywhere.

✓ So I usually make lists on my phone because I carry my phone everywhere.

Use plural 'lists' for repeated actions and maintain simple present for habits. Remove filler words. Suggestion: use consistent plurality for habitual actions.

× I do not. Sometimes I just forget to, umm, get the papers so I not forget the phone.

✓ Sometimes I just forget to get the papers, so I do not forget my phone.

Fragment 'I do not.' is incomplete. 'I not forget the phone' lacks auxiliary 'do' and uses wrong object article; use 'do not forget my phone.' Suggestion: avoid fragments and include auxiliaries for negatives in present tense.

× So I usually make any kind of list on my phone because it helps me to, uh, set the reminder.

✓ So I usually make lists on my phone because it helps me set reminders.

'Helps me to set the reminder' is slightly awkward; 'helps me set reminders' is more natural. Also pluralize 'lists' and 'reminders' for general use. Suggestion: after 'helps' use base verb without 'to' and use plurals for habitual items.