列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Reduce hesitation and repetition, start with a clear topic sentence, and add one specific example using a linking word. Keep within 3–4 concise sentences. Focus on precise vocabulary (e.g., groceries, clothing) and correct phrasing (e.g., “what I need to buy” instead of “what I don't need to buy”).

示例: Yes. I usually make a shopping list, especially for groceries and clothing. For example, before a weekly shop I write down items I need, like milk, vegetables and a pair of jeans, so I don’t forget anything. This helps me save time and avoid impulse buys.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence stating you use lists at work, then explain how they help with one or two concrete benefits. Avoid filler words and incorrect phrasing; use linking words like “because” or “so” to show cause and effect. Keep answers to 2–3 sentences maximum.

示例: Yes. I make daily to‑do lists at work because I’m a production supervisor at a printing company. They help me prioritise tasks and ensure that urgent jobs meet their deadlines, so the whole team stays organised.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence explaining one main reason, then add a specific supporting detail or example using a linking word such as “because” or “for example.” Correct grammar (e.g., “making lists,” “a waste of time”) and avoid vague phrases like “like kind of stuff.”

示例: Some people dislike making lists because they believe it wastes time. For example, busy professionals may prefer to rely on memory or feel lists are too rigid, so they avoid writing things down.

建议: Begin with a clear preference statement, then explain a specific reason and give one concrete example using a linking word like “because” or “for example.” Reduce hesitation and use precise vocabulary (e.g., “Notes app,” “grocery list”). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I prefer making lists on my phone because it’s convenient and easy to update. For example, I use the Notes app to keep separate lists for groceries, clothing and work tasks, so I can check items off whenever I finish them.

× Yes, uh, I make a list when I shop, uh, like for grocery and for, uh, clothes or uh, uh, for food.

✓ Yes, I make a list when I shop, for groceries, clothes, or food.

Use of 'grocery' as a noun is incorrect here; the plural noun 'groceries' is needed. Also remove filler words and redundant phrases. Maintain simple present tense 'make' which is correct; adjust noun forms and parallel items for clarity.

× So I always make a list what I need to buy or what I don't need to buy or what I need to be like, say, for future things.

✓ So I always make a list of what I need to buy, what I don't need to buy, and what I will need in the future.

Missing preposition 'of' after 'make a list' (There be issue 3 not applicable); 'future things' is awkward—use 'in the future' or 'for future needs'. Also change 'need to be like, say, for future things' to 'will need in the future' to match meaning and tense.

× Yes, as I am working as production supervisor at printing company.

✓ Yes, I am working as a production supervisor at a printing company.

Missing articles: 'a' before 'production supervisor' and 'a' before 'printing company'. In English, job titles and singular countable nouns require articles unless modified. Also remove unnecessary 'as' after 'Yes'.

× So uh, I always make a list for my work, like what I need to do today or what I don't need to be uh, do or umm, yeah, it's definitely work when you have a list to do uh, so I, I suggest everyone.

✓ I always make a list for work, like what I need to do today or what I do not need to do. Yes, it definitely works when you have a to-do list, so I recommend it to everyone.

Multiple issues: 'what I don't need to be uh, do' is ungrammatical—use 'what I do not need to do'. 'It's definitely work' should be 'it definitely works' meaning 'it is effective'. 'Suggest everyone' requires object and correct verb: 'recommend it to everyone'. Use infinitive 'to do' and correct present tense forms.

× According to my view, some people think that making list is a waste of time.

✓ In my view, some people think that making a list is a waste of time.

'Making list' requires the article 'a' before 'list'. Also prefer 'In my view' to 'According to my view' for natural phrasing. Article error (22) corrected.

× So maybe they think we can remember like what we need to buy or what we need to do at work or like kind of stuff.

✓ They may think we can remember what we need to buy or what we need to do at work, things like that.

Remove filler 'like' and 'kind of stuff' for clarity and correct sentence structure. 'Maybe they think' changed to 'They may think' for conciseness. Pronoun use is acceptable but sentence was cluttered.

× So that's why they are not like the.

✓ So that's why they do not like making lists.

Original sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical ('they are not like the'). Clarify meaning by using correct verb phrase 'do not like making lists' and supply the object 'making lists'.

× As I am iPhone user so I always prefer uh to make a list on my phone.

✓ As an iPhone user, I prefer to make lists on my phone.

Missing article 'an' before 'iPhone user'. 'Always prefer to make a list' is acceptable, but plural 'lists' is more natural for habitual action. Remove filler 'uh' and combine clauses with a comma.

× Uh, I have a notes app where I can make a list for grocery and my clothes or my work.

✓ I have a Notes app where I can make a list for groceries, clothes, or work.

Use plural 'groceries' (singular/plural). 'Notes' as app name is capitalized in natural use but not required—treated as a noun. 'For grocery and my clothes or my work' has incorrect preposition/parallelism; use parallel nouns separated by commas. 'App where' is correct preposition usage.