列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve clarity and grammar, be concise, and use topic sentence with 1–3 supporting details. Avoid repetition (e.g., “usually” used twice). Use correct verb forms and prepositions (e.g., “when I shop,” “in the department store,” “walk down the aisles”). Add a brief reason or example with linking words (e.g., “because,” “so”).

示例: I don't usually make a shopping list. Instead, when I go to a department store I walk down the aisles and pick items I need because I prefer to decide based on what’s available. For example, in a grocery shop I choose fresh produce that looks good and put it in my basket.

建议: Make a clear topic sentence answering both parts, correct vocabulary (probably meant “tasks” not “tax”), and organize reasons with linking words. Use one or two concise supporting details about when the list helps and whether it’s effective.

示例: I don't usually make long work lists, but I sometimes write a short list of tasks in the morning for important events so I don't forget them. This method usually works for me because it reminds me of urgent items, though I rely on memory for everyday tasks.

建议: Start with a clear general statement, use precise language, and contrast reasons using linking words (e.g., “however,” “because”). Avoid vague phrases like “nature of portion.” Provide specific reasons (personality, flexibility, spontaneity) and one short example.

示例: Some people dislike making lists because they prefer flexibility and spontaneity, while others make lists to stay organized and avoid forgetting things. For instance, spontaneous shoppers often enjoy choosing items on impulse rather than following a plan.

建议: Provide a clear preference sentence then two concise reasons with correct phrasing and linking words. Correct awkward phrases (e.g., “on the other hand”), and be specific about advantages and disadvantages. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I prefer to make lists on my phone because it’s portable and I always carry it with me, so I can check items anytime. On the other hand, paper lists can be inconvenient because they can get wet or lost.

× No, I don't prepare any kind of list when I stop.

✓ No, I don't prepare any kind of list when I shop.

The student likely meant 'shop' not 'stop'; this is a word choice/structure error that makes the sentence meaningless in context. Replace 'stop' with 'shop' to match the question about shopping.

× Usually when I'm the department store I usually look at all the aisle and I will choose goods I want to purchase at that moment.

✓ Usually when I'm at the department store I look at all the aisles and choose the goods I want to purchase at that moment.

Multiple issues: missing preposition 'at' before 'the department store' and incorrect article/number agreement 'aisle' should be plural 'aisles'. Also avoid redundant 'usually' and unnecessary future 'will'—simple present 'look' and 'choose' are appropriate for habitual actions.

× For example, if I'm in the grocery shop, I usually go over it and prefer what I like and put it in the basket.

✓ For example, if I'm in the grocery store, I usually look through it, pick what I like, and put it in the basket.

Use 'store' or 'shop' consistently ('grocery store' is more natural). 'Go over it' is unnatural for browsing; 'look through it' or 'browse' is better. Use parallel verbs 'pick' and 'put' for clarity and concise expression.

× No, I don't usually make a list for my work, but sometimes I have a small list of tax, especially in the morning when I'm going for something events related to work so I don't forget it, which is unusual for my daily tax.

✓ No, I don't usually make a list for my work, but sometimes I have a small to-do list, especially in the morning when I have work-related events, so I don't forget them.

The original contains incorrect words ('tax' instead of 'tasks' or 'to-do list'), awkward phrasing and agreement ('something events', 'which is unusual for my daily tax'). Replace with 'to-do list' and 'work-related events', use plural pronoun 'them' to refer to multiple events, and simplify sentence structure.

× Many people often have their own behavior, so it depends on the nature of portion.

✓ Many people often have their own habits, so it depends on their personality.

'Behavior' and 'nature of portion' are incorrect or awkward. 'Habits' or 'behaviors' and 'personality' fit the meaning. Also use 'their' to agree with 'many people'.

× Some people like to be organized and don't want to forget something, but some people like me don't want to rely on any kind of list and want to get whatever they want.

✓ Some people like to be organized and don't want to forget things, but others, like me, prefer not to rely on any kind of list and just get what they want.

Use 'things' instead of 'something' after 'forget'. Use 'others' to contrast groups, and insert commas around 'like me'. 'Prefer not to rely' is more natural than 'don't want to rely' and use parallel structure 'prefer not to... and just...'. Also change 'whatever they want' to 'what they want' for naturalness.

× I prefer to make a list on my phone rather than paper because the phone size is portable and I always carry my phone wherever I go.

✓ I prefer to make a list on my phone rather than on paper because a phone is portable and I always carry mine wherever I go.

Include 'on' before 'paper'. Use 'a phone is portable' or 'my phone is portable' rather than 'the phone size is portable'. Use 'mine' to avoid repetition and natural possessive pronoun.

× But the other hands people is usually not convenient for me and it can be it can get wet or even get lost.

✓ But on the other hand, paper is usually not convenient for me because it can get wet or be lost.

'The other hands people' is incorrect. Use the phrase 'on the other hand' to introduce a contrast. Specify the subject 'paper' (not 'people') and correct verb forms: 'can get wet' and 'be lost'. Remove redundancy 'it can be it can'.