列表— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, reduce filled pauses, and provide one or two specific reasons or an example. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas. Keep it under five sentences.

示例: No, I usually don't make a shopping list because I buy things spontaneously. For example, I often shop only when I need something urgent, so I prefer to decide items as I go rather than plan in advance.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence saying whether you use lists for work, then explain how they help with one specific benefit and give a brief example. Avoid repetition and fillers; use linking words like "because" or "so".

示例: Yes, I make lists for my assignments because they help me organize tasks and stay focused. For instance, I write down each step—research, draft, revise—so I can follow a clear order and finish my work more efficiently.

建议: Answer directly and give two clear reasons with linking words (e.g., "because", "so"). Use specific wording like "time-consuming" or "too rigid" instead of vague phrases. Limit to two to three sentences.

示例: Some people don't like making lists because it can be time-consuming and feels too rigid. As a result, they prefer a flexible approach and find planning stressful rather than helpful.

建议: Start with a direct preference sentence, then give two specific advantages with linking words and a brief example. Remove hesitations and keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

示例: I prefer making lists on my smartphone because it's convenient and I can check them anytime. For example, when I'm at the store I simply open my notes app and tick off items, which saves time and avoids losing the list.

× I would say I don't make any list 'cause I don't plan to buy something, just I buy very, uh, spontaneously.

✓ I would say I don't make any lists because I don't plan to buy anything; I just buy things very spontaneously.

The sentence has present tense and countability issues: 'list' should be plural 'lists' to match general habit, 'something' is unnatural in negative contexts so 'anything' is correct, and 'buy very spontaneously' needs an object 'things' for clarity. Also replace informal 'cause' with 'because' and add a semicolon for clarity.

× And I don't usually go shopping a lot.

✓ I don't usually go shopping often.

The adverb phrase 'a lot' is informal and awkward after 'go shopping'; 'often' is a clearer adverb of frequency. This corrects adverb usage within present tense description.

× Uh, for me, I walk list for doing assignment, like doing, uh, studies.

✓ For me, I make lists for doing assignments and studying.

The original has incorrect verb choice 'walk list', incorrect word order and pluralization. 'Make lists' is the correct collocation, 'assignments' should be plural to match general habit, and 'studying' is the correct gerund form. This fixes sentence structure and verb usage.

× It makes me it, it makes me feel very, umm, comfortable to do something smoothly to make the flow of the walk.

✓ It makes me feel comfortable doing tasks smoothly and maintaining the flow of work.

The sentence has repetition ('it makes me it, it makes me') and wrong noun 'walk' likely meant 'work'. Use gerund phrases 'doing tasks' and 'maintaining the flow of work' for natural expression; remove redundant words.

× Because it's just take time to make a list and it's something sometimes hard to, umm, design our pathway to do something, to achieve something.

✓ Because it just takes time to make a list, and sometimes it's hard to plan the steps to achieve something.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it just take' should be 'it just takes' (3rd person singular). 'Design our pathway' is unnatural; use 'plan the steps' or 'plan the process'. Simplify repeated phrases and correct word order.

× Yeah, it's, uh, hardworking.

✓ Yes, it's hard work.

'Hardworking' describes a person, not a task. Use 'hard work' to describe an activity. Keep present tense description consistent.

× And yeah, sometime they hate do that.

✓ And yeah, sometimes they hate doing that.

Adverb 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. After 'hate', use the gerund 'doing' not the base verb 'do'. This fixes adverb form and verb+ -ing usage.

× Do you prefer to make a list on paper or your phone?

✓ Do you prefer to make a list on paper or on your phone?

Parallel prepositional phrases require repeating the preposition 'on' for clarity: 'on paper or on your phone'. This corrects article/preposition parallelism.

× I I like, uh, making a list on my smartphone rather than doing on the paper because it's very convenient to bring anywhere, anytime and I I can check whenever I want to umm.

✓ I like making lists on my smartphone rather than on paper because it's very convenient to take anywhere, and I can check them whenever I want.

Use plural 'lists' for habitual action, repeat preposition 'on' for parallelism, replace 'doing on the paper' with 'on paper', change 'bring' to 'take' for correct verb choice, and use 'check them' to refer back to 'lists'. Remove filler repetitions. This keeps present tense and improves clarity.