图书馆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat clear but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "disturbing stimulate" and "than library." Try to use simpler, correct expressions and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer concise and natural.

示例: No, I don't often go to the library. Although it's a good place to study, I prefer my own quiet room where I can focus without distractions.

建议: Your answer repeats information and uses informal phrases like "hit the books" and "in the same boat" which may not be appropriate here. Try to answer directly about your own experience and use formal, clear language. Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure.

示例: I don't usually go to the library, but I know that many people use it to study because it offers a quiet environment without distractions.

建议: Your answer is understandable but has some repetition and awkward phrasing, especially the last sentence which is incomplete. Try to organize your answer clearly and avoid repeating the same idea. Use linking words to improve coherence.

示例: No, I didn't go to the library as a child because my mother thought I might play instead of studying. So, I studied at home instead.

建议: Your answer is vague and contains unclear reasoning. Avoid filler phrases like "if you ask me" and provide a more direct, logical response. Also, try to give specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

示例: I'm not sure about the exact facts, but I think many Chinese children go to the library to study because libraries provide a quiet place and access to many resources.

× No, I don't. Although the libraries are the best places to hit the books but I prefer to study in quiet environment that there isn't any disturbing stimulate.

✓ No, I don't. Although the libraries are the best places to hit the books, I prefer to study in a quiet environment where there isn't any disturbing stimulus.

The sentence incorrectly uses both 'Although' and 'but' together, which is redundant. Use either 'Although' or 'but' to connect clauses, not both. Also, 'quiet environment' needs an article 'a', and 'stimulate' should be 'stimulus' as a noun meaning something that causes a reaction.

× In this condition I prefer to study in my own private room than library.

✓ In this condition, I prefer to study in my own private room rather than the library.

The phrase 'prefer to study in my own private room than library' is incorrect. The correct comparative structure is 'prefer X rather than Y'. Also, 'library' needs the definite article 'the' here because it refers to a specific place.

× Actually, I don't usually go to the library, but most of the people go to the library to hit the books in a environment which is quiet without distractions and they are in the same boat to study.

✓ Actually, I don't usually go to the library, but most people go to the library to hit the books in an environment which is quiet and without distractions, and they are in the same boat to study.

The phrase 'most of the people' is better as 'most people' for general statements. 'a environment' is incorrect; 'environment' starts with a vowel sound, so it should be 'an environment'. Also, 'quiet without distractions' needs 'and' to connect the adjectives properly.

× No, I didn't. My mother didn't allow me to go to the library because she thought if the children go to the library they won't study, they will play instead of studying. And when I was a kid I didn't go to the library and now I don't go to the.

✓ No, I didn't. My mother didn't allow me to go to the library because she thought if children go to the library, they won't study; they will play instead of studying. And when I was a kid, I didn't go to the library and now I don't go to it.

The phrase 'the children' is incorrect when speaking generally; 'children' without 'the' is correct. The last sentence ends abruptly with 'to the.' It should be 'to it' to refer back to the library. Also, commas are needed after introductory phrases for clarity.

× I really don't know the fact, but if you ask me, and in my view, because China is a populated country and maybe they have extensive families, children will go to the library to study.

✓ I really don't know the fact, but if you ask me, in my view, because China is a populated country and maybe they have extensive families, children will go to the library to study.

The conjunction 'and' after 'if you ask me' is unnecessary and disrupts sentence flow. Removing 'and' improves clarity. Also, 'the fact' is awkward; 'the facts' or 'the situation' might be better, but as per instructions, only correcting grammar problem types listed.