图书馆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors such as 'at to my school time'. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly answering the question first, then adding supporting details. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure.

示例: I don't often go to the library nowadays, but when I was at school, I used to visit the library regularly and read many books there.

建议: Your answer is repetitive and a bit confusing. Try to answer directly and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid repeating the same information and improve sentence clarity.

示例: Usually, I read books in the library with my friends, and sometimes we wrote stories together, which made our visits enjoyable.

建议: Avoid informal words like 'gossip' in this context as it may sound inappropriate. Also, try to structure your answer clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words for coherence.

示例: Yes, I often went to the library as a child. I used to go with my friends, where we read many books and enjoyed spending time together.

建议: Your answer is contradictory and contains grammatical errors. Be clear and consistent in your opinion. Use linking words to explain your reasoning and avoid repetition.

示例: I don't think Chinese kids often go to the library nowadays because they prefer reading online on their mobile phones or newspapers. When they have free time, they usually choose to use their phones rather than visit the library.

× Honestly speaking, I do not go to the library for reading books, but at to my school time there was a library.

✓ Honestly speaking, I do not go to the library for reading books, but during my school time there was a library.

The phrase 'at to my school time' is incorrect. The correct preposition to indicate a period during which something happened is 'during'. Hence, 'during my school time' is the proper usage.

× As I earlier mentioned, I do not go to the library but on my school days I went to the library with my friends and we read books and we also wrote story books there and we really enjoyed there by reading books.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I do not go to the library now, but during my school days I went to the library with my friends. We read books and also wrote story books there, and we really enjoyed reading books there.

The phrase 'on my school days' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'during' to indicate a period of time. Also, 'As I earlier mentioned' should be 'As I mentioned earlier' for natural word order. Additionally, 'enjoyed there by reading books' is awkward; 'enjoyed reading books there' is clearer.

× Yes, of course. I went to the library when I was a kid and I went to library with my friends and there we did a lot of gossip and we read so many books and we really enjoyed there.

✓ Yes, of course. I went to the library when I was a kid and I went to the library with my friends. There, we did a lot of gossip, read many books, and really enjoyed ourselves.

The phrase 'went to library' is missing the article 'the'. Also, 'enjoyed there' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'enjoyed ourselves' to indicate that we had fun. Adding commas improves sentence clarity.

× No, I don't think so. Chinese kids often go to the library because in modern era now children's prefer to read through online like from their mobile phones and sometimes their newspaper. But if they have free time they always prefer prefer to use phone.

✓ No, I don't think so. Chinese kids often do not go to the library because in the modern era children prefer to read online, like from their mobile phones and sometimes newspapers. But if they have free time, they always prefer to use their phones.

The sentence has pronoun errors: 'children's' is possessive but should be plural 'children'. Also, 'prefer prefer' is a repetition error. 'Use phone' lacks possessive pronoun; it should be 'use their phones'. Additionally, 'read through online' is awkward; 'read online' is better. 'Their newspaper' should be plural 'newspapers'.