图书馆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và rõ ràng, nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ chưa chính xác, ví dụ như 'promote me to study' nên sửa thành 'helps me to study'. Bạn nên sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, tránh lặp từ và thêm liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

示例: Yes, definitely. I go to the library almost every day after finishing my lessons at art school because I enjoy the peaceful and quiet environment, which helps me concentrate better on my studies.

建议: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ 'promotes me to study' nên là 'motivates me to study' và 'keep undistractive' không đúng, nên dùng 'stay focused'. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời hơi dài và lặp từ, bạn nên dùng liên từ để câu mạch lạc và tránh lặp từ.

示例: I usually spend most of my time studying in the library because its studious and motivating atmosphere helps me stay focused. However, sometimes I also search for information in various documents.

建议: Câu trả lời có lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu phức tạp không tự nhiên. Ví dụ, 'was formed since I was at grade 2' nên là 'I developed the habit of going to the library when I was in grade 2'. Ngoài ra, câu cuối 'I'm really happy to observing it growing up' không đúng, nên là 'I'm really happy to see how it has developed over time'. Bạn nên dùng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.

示例: Yes, I developed the habit of going to the library when I was in grade 2. Back then, the library was not modern and lacked high-tech facilities like it has now. I'm really happy to see how it has improved over the years.

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt về nội dung và cấu trúc, nhưng có một số lỗi nhỏ về cách dùng từ như 'dedicated on studying' nên là 'dedicated to studying' và 'the net' nên là 'the internet'. Bạn nên sử dụng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

示例: Yes, in my opinion, Chinese students spend more time in the library than in entertainment places like shopping malls or on the internet because they are very dedicated to studying and hope to have better jobs and opportunities in the future.

× I go to the library almost every day after completing my lessons at art formal school.

✓ I go to the library almost every day after completing my lessons at an art formal school.

The sentence is missing the article 'an' before 'art formal school'. In English, singular countable nouns usually require an article. Here, 'art formal school' is a singular noun phrase, so it needs 'an' to be grammatically correct.

× I really enjoy the peace and the quiet environment which can promote me to study.

✓ I really enjoy the peace and the quiet environment which can help me to study.

The verb 'promote' is incorrectly used with the pronoun 'me'. The correct verb here is 'help' because 'promote' does not take a direct object in this context. 'Help me to study' is the correct phrase.

× Most of my time going to library is studying because the library's environment is really really studious and motivating, which promotes me to study more and keep undistractive.

✓ Most of my time spent in the library is studying because the library's environment is really studious and motivating, which helps me study more and stay focused.

The phrase 'Most of my time going to library' is ungrammatical; it should be 'Most of my time spent in the library'. Also, 'promotes me to study more and keep undistractive' is incorrect; 'helps me study more and stay focused' is the correct expression. 'Undistractive' is not a correct word; 'stay focused' is better.

× However, sometimes I also look for some information documentations.

✓ However, sometimes I also look for some informational documents.

The phrase 'information documentations' is incorrect. 'Documentation' is usually uncountable or pluralized as 'documents'. 'Informational documents' is a better phrase to express the intended meaning.

× Yes, actually the habit of going to the library was formed since I was at grade 2 and at that time the library wasn't modernized and have much more high technology facilities compared to the library in the present.

✓ Yes, actually the habit of going to the library was formed when I was in grade 2, and at that time the library wasn't modernized and didn't have as many high-tech facilities compared to the library now.

The phrase 'was formed since I was at grade 2' is incorrect; 'was formed when I was in grade 2' is correct. Also, 'have much more high technology facilities' should be 'didn't have as many high-tech facilities' to match past tense and correct quantifier usage.

× So I'm really happy to observing it growing up.

✓ So I'm really happy to observe it growing up.

The phrase 'happy to observing' is incorrect; after 'happy to' the base form of the verb should be used, so 'happy to observe' is correct.

× Yes, in my opinion, Chinese students spend more time in the library compared to other entertainment places, for example shopping malls or the net, because they're really dedicated on studying and hope for better job, careers and opportunities in the future.

✓ Yes, in my opinion, Chinese students spend more time in the library compared to other entertainment places, for example shopping malls or the internet, because they're really dedicated to studying and hope for better jobs, careers, and opportunities in the future.

The phrase 'dedicated on studying' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'dedicated to studying'. Also, 'the net' is better expressed as 'the internet'. Additionally, 'job' should be plural 'jobs' to match 'careers and opportunities'.