图书馆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'it's helped me wide my knowledge' nên là 'it has helped me widen my knowledge'. Bạn nên trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và sử dụng cấu trúc câu chính xác hơn.

示例: Yes, I often go to the library because I enjoy reading. It helps me borrow books easily and expand my knowledge during my free time.

建议: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ 'go to the library' nhiều lần trong câu. Hãy sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và đa dạng từ vựng hơn.

示例: I usually visit the library near my house almost every week. Sometimes, I read books there, and other times, I bring my laptop to complete my homework.

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn có lỗi ngữ pháp và câu cuối không hoàn chỉnh. Bạn nên sử dụng thì quá khứ đúng và tránh câu hỏi không rõ ràng trong câu trả lời.

示例: Actually, I didn't go to the library much when I was a kid because I was busy with school and extra classes. However, I started visiting the library more often as I grew older.

建议: Bạn nên tránh nói 'I am not a Chinese' mà nên nói 'I am not Chinese'. Ngoài ra, từ 'privates' không phù hợp, bạn nên dùng 'privacy'. Hãy sử dụng câu trả lời rõ ràng và chính xác hơn.

示例: Although I am not Chinese, I believe that many Asian kids often visit the library to learn new things by reading books. They also use the quiet and private environment to do their homework.

× Of course, and because reading books is one of my hobbies so I usually go to the library to borrow and read books when I have free time and it's helped me wide my knowledge.

✓ Of course, because reading books is one of my hobbies, I usually go to the library to borrow and read books when I have free time, and it has helped me widen my knowledge.

The phrase 'it's helped me wide my knowledge' is incorrect because 'wide' is an adjective, not a verb. The correct verb form is 'widen' to express the action of making knowledge broader. Also, 'it's' should be 'it has' for clarity, and commas are needed to separate clauses properly.

× There is a library near my house, so I go to the library almost every week and sometimes I go to the library to read books and sometimes I bring my laptop to the library to do my homework.

✓ There is a library near my house, so I go to the library almost every week. Sometimes I go to the library to read books, and sometimes I bring my laptop to do my homework there.

The original sentence is grammatically correct in terms of 'there is' usage, but it is lengthy and repetitive. Breaking it into shorter sentences and avoiding repetition improves clarity and flow.

× Actually, I didn't go to the library when I was younger. In the past I had to go to school and some extra class, so I don't have many time to go to the library and read books as I want. But when I was bigger and taller?

✓ Actually, I didn't go to the library when I was younger. In the past, I had to go to school and some extra classes, so I didn't have much time to go to the library and read books as I wanted. But when I was bigger and taller, I started going more often.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly ('don't have' should be 'didn't have'). 'Extra class' should be plural 'extra classes'. 'Many time' is incorrect; 'much time' is correct for uncountable nouns. The last sentence is incomplete and needs to be finished properly.

× I am not a Chinese but I'm Asian and from my perspective, I think Asian kids often go to the library to learn something new by reading books and sometimes they go to the library to do their homework because in the library there is silence and privates.

✓ I am not Chinese but I'm Asian, and from my perspective, I think Asian kids often go to the library to learn something new by reading books. Sometimes they go to the library to do their homework because the library is quiet and private.

'A Chinese' is incorrect; 'Chinese' is an adjective or plural noun without 'a'. 'There is silence and privates' is incorrect; 'silence' is uncountable and 'privates' is not appropriate here. The correct words are 'quiet' and 'private' to describe the library environment.