图书馆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and give one or two specific supporting details (when, how often, what you do there). Use linking words if adding reasons. Watch article and adjective use (e.g., "a quiet place").

示例: Yes. I usually go to my college library three or four times a week because it’s a quiet place where I can concentrate. For example, I often use a study carrel to read textbooks and prepare for exams.

建议: Directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence and specific activities. Avoid unclear phrases and repetition. Use linking words to add detail (e.g., "mainly", "often", "for example"). Correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g., "quiet place"). Keep to one to three short sentences.

示例: I mainly study and read in the library. Often I review lecture notes, read reference books, and sometimes work on group projects with classmates.

建议: Correct factual/phrasing errors and be concise. Do not use incorrect words like "dead"—use "a child" or "young". Give a clear reason and one supporting detail. Use linking words for clarity (e.g., "because", "so").

示例: No, I didn’t go to the library much as a child because my school encouraged outdoor play. For example, we usually spent break times playing football or cricket with classmates.

建议: Give a balanced, concise view with specific reasons and avoid vague idioms. Start with a clear statement, then support with two specific reasons or examples. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Use natural expressions (e.g., "value education" rather than "third eye").

示例: Yes, many Chinese children do go to libraries because education is highly valued. For example, they often visit libraries to borrow reference books, use study spaces, or find dictionaries when preparing for exams.

× Yes, I usually go to the library as I am a student and when I go in my college I usually go to the library as it is quite place to study.

✓ Yes, I usually go to the library because I am a student, and when I am on campus I usually go to the library because it is a quiet place to study.

The sentence uses 'as' repeatedly and incorrectly and 'quite' is wrong form for 'quiet'. Use 'because' to express reason and 'quiet' as the correct adjective. Also replace 'go in my college' with 'am on campus' for natural phrasing and add commas to separate clauses. Grammar problem type ID:13

× As I mentioned above as I go away for my study as it is quite please.

✓ As I mentioned above, I go there to study because it is quiet and pleasant.

The original is ungrammatical and has incorrect word choices: 'go away for my study' is unclear and 'please' is incorrect form. Rephrase to a clear clause showing purpose and reasons. Add comma after introductory phrase. Grammar problem type ID:26

× No, when I was dead, I did not go to the library because mostly my teachers ask us to go to the playground and play with other children and play some sports like football, cricket, cocoa.

✓ No, when I was a child, I did not go to the library because mostly my teachers asked us to go to the playground to play with other children and play sports like football, cricket, and kabbadi.

'When I was dead' is incorrect; use 'when I was a child'. Teacher actions in the past should use past tense 'asked'. Use 'to play' for purpose and correct sport name 'kabbadi' (or another intended sport). Add commas for list. Grammar problem type ID:5

× According to me, yes, Chinese kids usually go to the library as education is the third eye of human being and Chinese kids also study. So they definitely go to the library when there's some difficulties in their studies. They go over there for dictionary or something useful books.

✓ In my opinion, yes, Chinese children usually go to the library because education is the third eye of human beings and they study a lot. So they definitely go to the library when they have difficulties in their studies. They go there for dictionaries or other useful books.

Use 'In my opinion' instead of 'According to me' and 'children' instead of 'kids' for consistency. 'Human being' should be plural 'human beings.' Use 'have difficulties' not 'there's some difficulties' (subject-verb agreement). 'Go over there' is informal; use 'go there'. Use plural 'dictionaries' and 'other useful books'. Grammar problem type ID:12