鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear but a bit repetitive and slightly informal. Try to avoid repeating the same idea (loving shoes) multiple times and use more precise vocabulary. Also, try to make your sentences more concise and natural. For example, instead of saying "I am a person who really loves fashion, and shoes are part of it," you could say "I love fashion, and shoes are an important part of my style."

示例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes quite a lot because they complement my fashion sense. I usually prefer sports shoes and buy them frequently when my budget allows.

建议: Your answer is incomplete and a bit unclear at the end. Try to finish your thoughts fully and avoid filler words like "uh." Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent. For example, explain why you prefer retail shops and give specific reasons.

示例: No, I have never bought shoes online because I find it difficult to choose the right size. Moreover, I have read reviews where customers received shoes that looked different from the pictures, so I prefer buying from physical stores to avoid such problems.

建议: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve it by adding a linking phrase and making it more natural. For example, you can start with a topic sentence and then specify the amount you spend.

示例: I don't set a strict budget for shoes; however, I usually spend around 20,000 to 30,000 Nepali rupees on them each year.

建议: Your answer is relevant but incomplete at the end and a bit repetitive. Try to finish your sentences and avoid repeating similar ideas. Use linking words to connect your points smoothly.

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I enjoy walking a lot. For instance, I find heels uncomfortable and painful to wear. The last time I wore heels was at my graduation ceremony, and I didn't enjoy it much.

× I always prefer buying it through a retail shop because most of the time the sizes can be wrong in uh Internet and I have read many reviews that said they have gotten different design of shoes from what they have ordered and it makes me.

✓ I always prefer buying them through retail shops because most of the time the sizes can be wrong on the Internet and I have read many reviews that said they have gotten different designs of shoes from what they ordered and it makes me.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect when referring to 'shoes' which is plural; it should be 'them'. Also, 'in uh Internet' is incorrect preposition usage; it should be 'on the Internet'. 'Different design' should be plural 'different designs' to agree with plural 'shoes'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I don't have a exact budget regarding shoes, but if I have to say, I think I often spend almost 20,000 to 30,000 Nepali rupees in shoes.

✓ I don't have an exact budget regarding shoes, but if I have to say, I think I often spend almost 20,000 to 30,000 Nepali rupees on shoes.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a vowel sound as in 'exact'. Also, the preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to spending money on something; it should be 'on' shoes.

× The last time I remember wearing a heel was in graduation and my fit was.

✓ The last time I remember wearing heels was at graduation and my feet hurt.

'Heel' should be plural 'heels' to match the context. 'In graduation' is incorrect preposition usage; it should be 'at graduation'. The phrase 'my fit was' is incomplete and unclear; it should be 'my feet hurt' to express discomfort.