鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is relevant but a bit lengthy and slightly repetitive. Try to be more concise and avoid redundancy by combining ideas smoothly. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

示例: Yes, I like buying shoes quite often because I have over 20 pairs in my wardrobe, and I usually purchase new designs whenever they are released.

建议: Your answer is clear and detailed but could be improved by using linking words to connect ideas and by avoiding informal phrases like 'kind of'. Also, try to make sentences more concise.

示例: Yes, I usually buy shoes online because visiting stores can be hectic, and online shopping gives me ample time to compare different designs and choose the best one.

建议: Your answer is unclear due to confusing numbers and phrasing. Be specific and clear about the amount you spend, and avoid vague expressions. Also, use linking words to explain exceptions.

示例: I usually spend between 5,000 to 10,000 rupees on shoes, but I might spend more if the design is particularly meaningful or valuable to me.

建议: Your answer is good but can be improved by using more natural phrasing and linking words. Also, avoid repeating similar words and try to be more concise.

示例: My shoe collection includes both comfortable and fashionable pairs, but I usually prefer shoes that combine comfort with style.

× I have 20 plus pairs of shoes in my wardrobe and I buy them repeatedly whenever any new edition or any new design comes out.

✓ I have 20 plus pairs of shoes in my wardrobe and I buy them repeatedly whenever any new edition or any new designs come out.

The phrase 'any new edition or any new design' should use plural 'designs' to match the plural context and maintain parallel structure. Using plural here is more natural when referring to multiple possible new designs.

× Usually I buy shoes online only as going to stores is kind of a hectic thing because you don't get enough time to think that which shoe is better for you and online you have plenty of time to compare shoes and see different designs.

✓ Usually I buy shoes only online as going to stores is kind of a hectic thing because you don't get enough time to think about which shoe is better for you and online you have plenty of time to compare shoes and see different designs.

The phrase 'think that which shoe is better' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'think about which shoe is better'. 'Think about' is used when considering or reflecting on something.

× My usual budget varies under 5010 thousand.

✓ My usual budget varies between 5,000 to 10,000.

The phrase 'varies under 5010 thousand' is unclear and incorrect. 'Between 5,000 to 10,000' correctly expresses a range. Also, '5010 thousand' is ambiguous and likely a typo.

× But usually it varies under 5000 to 10,000.

✓ But usually it varies between 5,000 and 10,000.

The phrase 'varies under 5000 to 10,000' is incorrect. The correct preposition for ranges is 'between' and the conjunction 'and' is used to connect the two numbers.

× As my shoes collection has versatility, it has comfy shoes and fashionable shoes both.

✓ As my shoe collection has versatility, it has both comfy shoes and fashionable shoes.

The phrase 'my shoes collection' is incorrect; the correct form is 'my shoe collection' because 'collection' is singular and 'shoe' acts as an adjective here. Also, 'both' should come before the two items it refers to.

× But usually I like to buy the combination of them that it should be comfortable and fashionable at the same point of time.

✓ But usually I like to buy a combination of them so that it is comfortable and fashionable at the same time.

The phrase 'the combination of them that it should be' is awkward and incorrect. Using 'a combination of them so that it is' is clearer. Also, 'at the same point of time' is better expressed as 'at the same time'.