鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks clear structure. Try to start with a direct response to the question, then add specific details using linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

示例: Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes and do it quite regularly. I have a growing collection at home because I like to explore different styles. For example, I often visit the same store where I find new designs that catch my eye. This habit helps me keep my collection fresh and varied.

建议: Your answer addresses the question but could be improved by organizing your ideas more clearly and using linking words to connect your points. Also, try to use more natural phrasing and avoid repeating the same words.

示例: No, I have never bought shoes online because I don't trust online stores in my country. Many sellers claim to offer branded shoes, but when the package arrives, the quality is often poor. Therefore, I prefer to buy shoes in physical stores where I can check them before purchasing.

建议: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to give a direct answer with specific details and complete your sentences. Use linking words to explain your spending habits clearly and avoid hesitation sounds like 'umm'.

示例: I usually spend a moderate amount on shoes, but the most I have spent is about 5000 on a pair of New Balance shoes. They were very comfortable and durable, so I think it was worth the price. However, I generally prefer not to spend too much on shoes.

建议: Your answer conveys your preference but has grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct grammar, avoid repetition, and use linking words to make your answer more fluent and natural.

示例: I usually prefer comfortable shoes because I have never been very interested in fashion. Comfortable shoes allow me to walk and travel easily, which is more important to me than following the latest trends.

× I like buying shoes very much because the variety of shoes I have been collected in my home, so I buy shoes like regularly.

✓ I like buying shoes very much because of the variety of shoes I have collected in my home, so I buy shoes regularly.

The phrase 'the variety of shoes I have been collected' is incorrect because 'have been collected' is passive and does not fit here. It should be 'I have collected' to indicate active possession. Also, 'like regularly' is incorrect; 'regularly' alone suffices to express frequency.

× I'm a regular customer in one shop and I frequently like the collection of the shoes, so I buy it often to have a better collection.

✓ I'm a regular customer at one shop and I frequently like the collection of shoes, so I buy them often to have a better collection.

The phrase 'in one shop' should be 'at one shop' to indicate location. 'The collection of the shoes' is better as 'the collection of shoes' without 'the' before shoes. Also, 'I buy it often' is incorrect because 'collection' is singular but the object being bought is 'shoes' (plural), so 'them' is appropriate.

× No, I've really never bought any shoes from online store because I don't have a trust in online store in my country because they have been pretending to be a very branded shoes with high quality but when we get the parcel it's very low quality and it's not good.

✓ No, I've really never bought any shoes from an online store because I don't trust online stores in my country since they pretend to sell very branded shoes with high quality, but when we get the parcel, it's very low quality and not good.

The phrase 'from online store' needs an article 'an' before 'online store'. 'I don't have a trust in online store' is incorrect; it should be 'I don't trust online stores'. Also, 'they have been pretending to be a very branded shoes' is incorrect; 'pretend to sell very branded shoes' is better. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Umm the maximum amount is 5000 where I buy a New Balance shoes when I was in so they are up and that's my highest price of a shoes I have bought till now.

✓ Umm, the maximum amount is 5000 when I bought New Balance shoes; that is my highest price for shoes I have bought till now.

'A New Balance shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and cannot be preceded by 'a'. Also, 'when I was in so they are up' is unclear and likely incorrect; it is omitted for clarity. 'Highest price of a shoes' should be 'highest price for shoes'.

× But that shoes is very good and I don't like to spend a lot of money on shoes but.

✓ But those shoes are very good and I don't like to spend a lot of money on shoes.

'That shoes is' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and requires 'those' and the verb 'are'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'but', which is removed for completeness.

× I usually prefer a comfortable shoes because I'm not that much fashionable person from my young age so I just used a comfortable shoes because it's provide the comfy and you can travel every areas with the comfortable shoes instead of wearing fashionable shoes.

✓ I usually prefer comfortable shoes because I'm not a very fashionable person since my young age, so I just use comfortable shoes because they provide comfort and you can travel to every area with comfortable shoes instead of wearing fashionable shoes.

'A comfortable shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and cannot be preceded by 'a'. 'I'm not that much fashionable person' should be 'I'm not a very fashionable person'. 'Used' should be 'use' to match present tense. 'It's provide the comfy' should be 'they provide comfort'. 'Every areas' should be 'every area'.