鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answerが不自然で文法的に誤りが多いです。質問に直接答え、理由を明確に述べ、5文以内で簡潔に話しましょう。例えば、"Yes, I like buying shoes because I enjoy choosing different styles. I usually buy new shoes every six months because they can be expensive."のように。

示例: Yes, I like buying shoes because I enjoy choosing different styles. I usually buy new shoes every six months because they can be expensive.

建议: 繰り返しや不自然な表現を避け、文を簡潔にまとめましょう。接続詞を使って論理的に話すと良いです。例えば、"Yes, I have bought shoes online many times because it is convenient. Also, if a store doesn't have my size, I can find it online."のように。

示例: Yes, I have bought shoes online many times because it is convenient. Also, if a store doesn't have my size, I can find it online.

建议: 金額の単位を明確にし、理由をわかりやすく述べましょう。文法の誤りを直し、具体的な説明を加えると良いです。例えば、"I usually spend about 20,000 yen per year on shoes because I buy new ones every six months. For example, I replace them when they get dirty."のように。

示例: I usually spend about 20,000 yen per year on shoes because I buy new ones every six months. For example, I replace them when they get dirty.

建议: 理由をもっと具体的にし、文法を正しく使いましょう。接続詞を使って文をつなげると自然です。例えば、"I prefer fashionable shoes because they look cute and make me feel happy. For example, when I wear fashionable shoes, I feel like a model."のように。

示例: I prefer fashionable shoes because they look cute and make me feel happy. For example, when I wear fashionable shoes, I feel like a model.

× Yes, I like purchasing my shoes because there are a bar, there are variety shoes and I buy I buy she's part six months is because shoes are too expensive to.

✓ Yes, I like purchasing my shoes because there is a bar, there are various shoes and I buy them every six months because shoes are too expensive.

The sentence has singular and plural issues: 'there are a bar' should be 'there is a bar' because 'bar' is singular; 'there are variety shoes' should be 'there are various shoes' to correctly use the plural adjective form; 'I buy she's part six months' is unclear and corrected to 'I buy them every six months' to express the intended meaning clearly.

× Yes, I I use use in order to buy shoes many times because it is so useful.

✓ Yes, I use it many times in order to buy shoes because it is so useful.

The repetition 'I use use' is a mistake; it should be 'I use it'. Also, 'use' is a verb and should not be repeated unnecessarily.

× We can buy shoes everywhere. For example, when you don't have, you don't have the size you can choose.

✓ We can buy shoes everywhere. For example, when you don't have the size, you can choose another one.

The sentence 'when you don't have, you don't have the size you can choose' is incomplete and confusing. It needs to specify what is not had (the size) and what can be done (choose another size).

× About 20,000 per year because I change my shoes for six months.

✓ About 20,000 per year because I change my shoes every six months.

The phrase 'for six months' is incorrect here; 'every six months' correctly expresses the frequency of changing shoes.

× For example, when I my shoes is dirty, I change my shoes.

✓ For example, when my shoes are dirty, I change them.

The subject 'shoes' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. Also, 'I my shoes' is incorrect; it should be 'when my shoes are dirty'. Using 'them' avoids repetition.

× I prefer fashionable shoes because it looks so cute and my feeling is I'm happy.

✓ I prefer fashionable shoes because they look so cute and they make me happy.

'Shoes' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'they' not 'it'. Also, 'my feeling is I'm happy' is awkward; 'they make me happy' is clearer.

× For example, when I when I wear a fashionable suit I I feel like as a model.

✓ For example, when I wear fashionable shoes, I feel like a model.

The sentence has repetition and incorrect phrase 'feel like as a model'. It should be 'feel like a model'. Also, 'fashionable suit' is likely a mistake; 'fashionable shoes' fits the context better.