鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more fluent and grammatically correct by avoiding repetition and using proper sentence structures. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and be more specific about your buying habits.

示例: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I only purchase them when I really need to. For instance, when my current shoes are worn out, I look for new ones that fit well and feel comfortable.

建议: Focus on clarity and coherence by structuring your answer logically and avoiding unclear phrases. Use linking words to explain your experience and preference clearly, and correct grammar mistakes.

示例: Yes, I have bought shoes online before, but it was not a good experience because the shoes did not fit me well and made my feet uncomfortable and even painful. Therefore, I think it's better to try shoes in a physical shop before buying.

建议: Improve your answer by using more precise vocabulary and clearer sentence structures. Avoid repetition and use linking words to explain your spending habits and preferences more effectively.

示例: I usually don't spend a lot of money on shoes because I prioritise comfort over price. I only buy new shoes when my old ones are worn out or too old to use.

建议: Make your answer clearer and more coherent by avoiding repetition and using linking words. Explain your preference with specific reasons and correct grammar to make your point more effective.

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes because we wear them every day, and if they are uncomfortable, it can affect how I feel throughout the day. Comfortable shoes help me feel good and confident.

× I just buy it when I need it.

✓ I just buy them when I need them.

The word 'shoes' is plural, so the pronoun referring to it should also be plural ('them') instead of singular ('it').

× When I when my shoes worn out I will buy the new one and I would like to buy the suit that fit me and make me feel comfortable.

✓ When my shoes wear out, I will buy new ones and I would like to buy the shoes that fit me and make me feel comfortable.

'Shoes' is plural, so 'the new one' should be 'new ones'. Also, 'worn out' is past participle; the correct present tense here is 'wear out' to match the future tense 'will buy'. 'Suit' is incorrect here; 'shoes' is appropriate. 'Fit' should be 'fit' as plural subject 'shoes' takes plural verb form.

× Yes I have bought the shoes all night but this is not a good experience because this was not very nice in the pet shop but it not fit me and my foot feel uncomfortable and even painful.

✓ Yes, I bought the shoes last night but it was not a good experience because they were not very nice in the shoe shop and they did not fit me; my feet felt uncomfortable and even painful.

'Have bought' is present perfect but 'all night' suggests a specific past time, so simple past 'bought' is better. 'Pet shop' is incorrect; 'shoe shop' is appropriate. 'It not fit me' should be 'they did not fit me' because 'shoes' is plural. 'Foot feel' should be 'feet felt' to agree in number and tense.

× I think it's better to go to the shoe shop to to try the the the shoes.

✓ I think it's better to go to the shoe shop to try the shoes.

Repeated words 'to to' and 'the the the' are errors and should be removed for clarity and correctness.

× I don't spend too much on shoes because I prefer to choose the comfortable one, not the expensive 1.

✓ I don't spend too much on shoes because I prefer to choose the comfortable ones, not the expensive ones.

'Shoes' is plural, so 'one' should be 'ones' to match the plural noun. Also, '1' should be spelled out as 'ones' for consistency.

× I just buy it when the old shoes run out or or my old shoes are too old.

✓ I just buy them when the old shoes wear out or when my old shoes are too old.

'Shoes' is plural, so 'it' should be 'them'. Also, 'run out' is incorrect for shoes; 'wear out' is the correct phrase. Repetition of 'or' should be corrected.

× I prefer comfortable shoes because we need to wear the shoes everyday if if they are not with us we will feel feel not good and and thankful that's will make me feel done that day.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because we need to wear shoes every day; if they are not with us, we will feel uncomfortable and ungrateful, which will make me feel that the day is ruined.

Repeated words 'if if' and 'feel feel' and 'and and' should be removed. 'Not good' is vague; 'uncomfortable' is more precise. 'Thankful' is incorrect in this context; 'ungrateful' or 'unhappy' fits better. 'That's will make me feel done that day' is unclear; rephrased for clarity.