鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하며, 중복된 표현을 피하고, 구체적인 빈도를 명확히 표현하는 것이 좋습니다.

示例: Yes, I enjoy buying sneakers because they are comfortable and stylish. I usually buy them about twice a month, but recently I have been trying to buy less often.

建议: 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 경험을 명확히 설명하고, 예시를 자연스럽게 연결하는 문장을 연습하세요.

示例: Yes, I have bought shoes online before, but it was not a good experience because it was hard to find shoes that fit me. For example, the pair I ordered was too big.

建议: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문법적 오류가 많습니다. 금액과 이유를 명확히 표현하고, 문장을 간결하게 구성하는 연습이 필요합니다.

示例: I usually spend about $100 on shoes. Although it's quite expensive for me, I think it's the average price nowadays. Therefore, I try to buy shoes less often, maybe less than twice a month.

建议: 문장이 어색하고 반복이 있습니다. 선호 이유를 명확히 하고, 예시를 자연스럽게 연결하는 문장을 연습하세요.

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I enjoy walking around the city. For example, I often walk for three or four hours at Changgetchan, a famous landmark in my city, so comfortable shoes are essential.

× Yes, I really enjoyed buying sneakers because it is so comfortable and fancy.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy buying sneakers because they are so comfortable and fancy.

The sentence uses 'enjoyed' which is past tense, but the context suggests a general preference, so present tense 'enjoy' is appropriate. Also, 'sneakers' is plural, so 'they are' should be used instead of 'it is'.

× Overall, for all it is is suitable to walk around the city, so I have about them twice a month, but in these days I try to reduce the number of times.

✓ Overall, they are suitable for walking around the city, so I buy them about twice a month, but these days I try to reduce the number of times.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect for plural 'sneakers'; 'they' should be used. Also, 'have about them' is incorrect; 'buy them' fits the context. 'In these days' should be 'these days'.

× Yes, I have both shoes online before, but it was not good experience to me because it is hard to find the shoes that fit to me.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online before, but it was not a good experience for me because it is hard to find shoes that fit me.

The phrase 'have both shoes online' is incorrect; 'have bought shoes online' is correct. 'Not good experience to me' should be 'not a good experience for me'. 'Fit to me' should be 'fit me'.

× For example, the shoes I ordered were too big to me so.

✓ For example, the shoes I ordered were too big for me.

The phrase 'too big to me so' is incorrect; it should be 'too big for me'. The sentence was incomplete and needed correction for clarity and grammar.

× Maybe I spend $100. Yes, it really expensive to me too, but I think it is the average cost in these days.

✓ Maybe I spend $100. Yes, it is really expensive for me too, but I think it is the average cost these days.

'It really expensive to me' is incorrect; it should be 'it is really expensive for me'. 'In these days' should be 'these days'.

× So I try to reduce the number of times I bought shoes for example from twice a month.

✓ So I try to reduce the number of times I buy shoes, for example, from twice a month.

The phrase 'number of times I bought shoes' mixes past tense with present intention; 'I buy shoes' fits better. Also, commas improve clarity.

× I prefer comfortable shoes exactly because my hobby is walking around the city.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes exactly because my hobby is walking around the city.

No grammatical error detected in this sentence.

× For example, these days I walk walk Chang get Chan which is landmark my city for three or four hours.

✓ For example, these days I walk around Chang Gate Chan, which is a landmark in my city, for three or four hours.

The sentence has repetition 'walk walk', missing prepositions, and incorrect word order. Correcting to 'walk around Chang Gate Chan, which is a landmark in my city' improves clarity and grammar.

× Yes, unless I wear comfortable shoes is not possible.

✓ Yes, unless I wear comfortable shoes, it is not possible.

The sentence lacks a subject and proper conjunction usage. Adding 'it' and a comma clarifies the meaning: 'it is not possible unless I wear comfortable shoes.'