鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is a bit unclear and incomplete. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, followed by specific details. Avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes quite often because I like having different types such as heels and flats. However, I am careful about my spending and only buy shoes when I really need them.

建议: Your answer conveys the main idea but has some grammatical errors and redundancy. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and avoid repeating the same point. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary.

示例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because it is very convenient. Since I am busy with work, I don't have much time to visit physical stores, so online shopping suits me well.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and repetitions. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use correct vocabulary and avoid filler words. Also, explain your spending habits with specific examples.

示例: I am quite careful about how much I spend on shoes. Usually, I don't spend a lot unless there is a sale or a special variety that I really like.

建议: Your answer is confusing and contains unclear phrases like 'festival shoes' and 'vegetable shoes'. Make sure to use correct vocabulary and express your ideas clearly. Structure your answer with a clear preference and reasons, using linking words.

示例: I often find it difficult to choose between fashionable and comfortable shoes. Although I usually buy fashionable ones, I realise later that comfort is more important, so I prefer comfortable shoes in general.

× I love buying shoes and different kind of variety like heels and the shoes and the flights and all kind of shoes I have really like to buy uh

✓ I love buying shoes and different kinds of variety like heels, flats, and all kinds of shoes I really like to buy

The phrase 'different kind of variety' is incorrect because 'kind' should be plural 'kinds' when referring to multiple types. Also, 'flights' is a mispronunciation or misspelling of 'flats' (a type of shoe). 'All kind of shoes' should be 'all kinds of shoes' to agree in number. These corrections ensure proper singular/plural agreement and correct vocabulary.

× and the shoes and the flights and all kind of shoes I have really like to buy uh

✓ and shoes, flats, and all kinds of shoes I really like to buy

The use of 'the' before 'shoes' and 'flights' is unnecessary here because the speaker is talking about shoes in general, not specific ones. Removing 'the' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× but I'm very particular about my expense. So when I need that kind of shoes or uh, I need the.

✓ but I'm very particular about my expenses. So when I need that kind of shoes, I buy them.

The phrase 'my expense' should be plural 'my expenses' to refer to spending in general. The sentence ends abruptly with 'I need the.' which is incomplete. Completing the sentence clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× Yes, I bought shoes online almost every time because it tastes very convenient as I'm doing the job so I don't have that much of time to go to the shop and shopping there.

✓ Yes, I buy shoes online almost every time because it is very convenient as I'm working, so I don't have much time to go to the shop and shop there.

The phrase 'I bought shoes online almost every time' mixes past tense 'bought' with a habitual action. Using present tense 'I buy' fits better. 'It tastes very convenient' is incorrect; 'it is very convenient' is correct. 'I'm doing the job' is awkward; 'I'm working' is better. 'That much of time' should be 'much time'. 'Go to the shop and shopping there' should be 'go to the shop and shop there' to maintain parallel verb forms.

× So I always bought shoes online.

✓ So I always buy shoes online.

The adverb 'always' indicates a habitual action, which should be expressed in the present tense 'buy' rather than past tense 'bought'.

× As far as I know, I'm very particular about my expense, so I don't, uh, do not spend so much money on my shoes, especially when I really need to buy them.

✓ As far as I know, I'm very particular about my expenses, so I do not spend much money on my shoes, especially when I really need to buy them.

'My expense' should be plural 'my expenses'. The phrase 'I don't, uh, do not spend' is redundant; use either 'I don't' or 'I do not'. 'So much money' can be simplified to 'much money' for better style.

× And, and then and if there is any sadist there or any different kind of varieties there, then and then only I spend.

✓ And if there is any sale or any different kinds of varieties, then only I spend.

The sentence has redundant conjunctions 'and, and then and'. 'Sadist' is a mispronunciation or misspelling of 'sale'. 'Different kind of varieties' should be 'different kinds of varieties' for plural agreement. The phrase 'then and then only I spend' is awkward; 'then only I spend' is clearer.

× I'm very confusing about every time that what should I buy festival shoes or comfortable shoes

✓ I'm very confused every time about what I should buy, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes

'Confusing' is an adjective describing something that causes confusion; the speaker should use 'confused' to describe their own feeling. 'Festival shoes' is likely a mispronunciation of 'fashionable shoes'. The sentence structure is improved by reordering for clarity.

× And I buy fashionable shoes. Then I after the wearing the shoes then I realise that I really need comfortable shoes.

✓ I buy fashionable shoes, but after wearing them, I realize that I really need comfortable shoes.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and incorrect word order. 'Then I after the wearing the shoes then I realise' is incorrect. The corrected sentence uses proper conjunctions and word order for clarity.

× So usually I prefer vegetable shoes.

✓ So usually I prefer comfortable shoes.

'Vegetable shoes' is a mispronunciation or incorrect word choice for 'comfortable shoes'. Correcting the adjective clarifies the intended meaning.