鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear but could be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating filler words like 'like' and try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details.

示例: I enjoy buying shoes mainly for special occasions. Typically, I purchase shoes two to three times a year, usually when there is a family function or a birthday celebration.

建议: Your answer conveys the main idea but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use past tense correctly and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

示例: Yes, I bought shoes online last month, but the experience was disappointing because I received a different color than I ordered. The shoes were too bright, which I didn't like, so it was a terrible experience for me.

建议: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical mistakes. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific details. Also, try to form complete sentences with correct verb forms.

示例: The amount I spend on shoes depends on my budget and the type of event I am attending. For instance, if I am going to a family function, I prefer to buy expensive shoes that match my outfit.

建议: Your answer is relevant but could be more fluent and natural. Avoid repeating 'like' and use linking words such as 'however' or 'on the other hand' to contrast ideas. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary and correct verb forms.

示例: It depends on the situation. For activities like hiking or picnics with friends, I prefer comfortable shoes. However, for family functions or birthday parties, I choose fashionable shoes to match the occasion.

× Mostly I like to buy shoes like for the special occasions and within a year I buy shoes like around two to three times when there is a function in my family or someone's birthday.

✓ Mostly I like buying shoes for special occasions and within a year I buy shoes around two to three times when there is a function in my family or someone's birthday.

The verb 'like' is commonly followed by the gerund form '-ing' when expressing preferences or habits. Using 'like to buy' is not incorrect but 'like buying' sounds more natural in this context. Also, unnecessary filler words like 'like' should be removed for clarity.

× Yes, when last month I bought shoes online, but my experience was so terrible because I got a different color which I was ordered and it's like too much bright and I don't like the bright color.

✓ Yes, last month I bought shoes online, but my experience was terrible because I received a different color than I had ordered and it was too bright, which I did not like.

The sentence had awkward phrasing and incorrect tense usage. 'Which I was ordered' is incorrect; it should be 'than I had ordered' to show comparison. 'It's like too much bright' is ungrammatical; 'it was too bright' is correct. Also, 'did not like' fits better in past tense narrative.

× Ah well, all this depend on my budget and sometimes it also depends on like what type of event I am attending.

✓ Ah well, all this depends on my budget and sometimes it also depends on what type of event I am attending.

The subject 'all this' is singular, so the verb should be 'depends' to agree in number. Also, unnecessary filler 'like' should be removed for clarity.

× So like for example, if I attending any function in my family, so I would like to buy the expensive shoes like which are uh com combining with my dress so like.

✓ So, for example, if I am attending any function in my family, I would like to buy expensive shoes that combine with my dress.

The verb 'attending' needs the auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense 'am attending'. Also, filler words like 'like' and 'uh' should be removed. 'Which are combining' is awkward; 'that combine' is more appropriate.

× Well, it's all depend on the situation. So like if I have to go outside for like long route like with a picnic with friends or hiking, that time I would prefer to comfortable shoes.

✓ Well, it all depends on the situation. So, if I have to go outside for a long time, like on a picnic with friends or hiking, at that time I would prefer comfortable shoes.

'It's all depend' is incorrect; it should be 'it all depends' for subject-verb agreement. 'Would prefer to comfortable shoes' is incorrect; the correct form is 'would prefer comfortable shoes' without 'to'. Also, 'long route' is awkward; 'long time' or 'long distance' is better.

× Moreover, if I am attending a family function or like going to a birthday party then of course over there I would prefer to wear fashionable shoes.

✓ Moreover, if I am attending a family function or going to a birthday party, then of course I would prefer to wear fashionable shoes.

The phrase 'like going' is unnecessary and should be removed for clarity. The sentence structure is improved by removing filler words and unnecessary phrases.