鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup baik, tetapi perlu memperbaiki tata bahasa dan menghindari pengulangan kata seperti 'online in online'. Selain itu, buatlah kalimat lebih alami dan efektif dengan menggabungkan alasan dan frekuensi pembelian secara jelas.

示例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes online because there are many discounts and promotions. However, I usually purchase shoes only once a year.

建议: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan hindari penggunaan kata pengisi seperti 'uh' dan 'umm'. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan jelas untuk menjelaskan pengalaman Anda berbelanja online, serta gunakan linking words untuk kelancaran.

示例: Yes, I have bought shoes online many times, especially after COVID-19 affected our country, because almost everything I need is now available online.

建议: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan terdapat kesalahan tata bahasa. Perbaiki struktur kalimat dan gunakan kosakata yang tepat. Jelaskan dengan spesifik berapa biasanya Anda menghabiskan uang dan alasan perbandingan dengan pakaian.

示例: I usually don't spend much on branded shoes because I use them mainly for walking. Compared to clothes, I spend less on shoes since clothes are needed for various occasions.

建议: Jawaban sudah cukup baik, namun perlu memperbaiki tata bahasa dan membuat kalimat lebih alami. Gunakan linking words untuk menjelaskan alasan dengan lebih jelas dan spesifik.

示例: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because I mainly use them for walking. If the shoes are not comfortable for my feet or knees, they become inconvenient to wear.

× I do like buying shoes at online store especially because there are so many discounts and also promotion.

✓ I do like buying shoes at an online store especially because there are so many discounts and also promotions.

The preposition 'at' is acceptable but 'in' or 'from' might be more natural. More importantly, 'online store' needs an article 'an' because it is a singular countable noun. Also, 'promotion' should be plural 'promotions' to match 'discounts'.

× But I think once in a year I bought online.

✓ But I think I buy online once a year.

The sentence mixes present tense 'think' with past tense 'bought' incorrectly. Since the speaker is talking about a habitual action, present tense 'buy' is appropriate. Also, 'once in a year' is better expressed as 'once a year'.

× Yeah, online in online.

✓ Yeah, online.

The phrase 'online in online' is redundant and incorrect. Simply saying 'online' suffices.

× As I mentioned before, I always bought shoes online, especially after the COVID-19, uh, was umm, encounter our country.

✓ As I mentioned before, I have always bought shoes online, especially after COVID-19 encountered our country.

The phrase 'always bought' is better expressed as 'have always bought' to indicate a repeated action up to now. Also, 'was umm, encounter' is incorrect; the correct past tense is 'encountered'.

× There's everything I need to shop is going online.

✓ Everything I need to shop for is available online.

The phrase 'There's everything I need to shop is going online' is ungrammatical. The correct expression is 'Everything I need to shop for is available online.' The preposition 'for' is necessary after 'shop'. Also, 'going online' is awkward here.

× I didn't rely on branded shoes, thus I just spending on shoes.

✓ I don't rely on branded shoes, so I just spend money on shoes.

The sentence mixes past tense 'didn't' with present continuous 'spending' incorrectly. Also, 'thus' is formal and 'so' is more natural here. The verb 'spending' should be 'spend' to match the present tense. 'I just spend money on shoes' is clearer.

× Not as much as clothes I think.

✓ Not as much as on clothes, I think.

The phrase lacks the preposition 'on' after 'as much as' to indicate comparison. It should be 'Not as much as on clothes'. Alternatively, 'Not as much as I spend on clothes' would be better.

× Yeah, because you know, she's is just for the walk.

✓ Yeah, because you know, shoes are just for walking.

'She's' is incorrect; it should be 'shoes' (plural). Also, 'is' should be 'are' to agree with plural 'shoes'. 'For the walk' is better expressed as 'for walking'.

× However, clothes is just for anything.

✓ However, clothes are just for anything.

'Clothes' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'.

× Of course I prefer comfortable shoes because it's just mainly for walking.

✓ Of course I prefer comfortable shoes because they are mainly for walking.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to 'shoes' which is plural. Therefore, 'they are' is correct.

× If it is not comfortable enough to your like or to your knee or to your foot, it's just not convenient enough.

✓ If they are not comfortable enough for your liking or for your knees or feet, they are just not convenient enough.

The pronoun 'it' should be 'they' to agree with plural 'shoes'. Also, 'to your like' is incorrect; 'for your liking' is correct. 'Knee' and 'foot' should be plural to match general reference. 'It's' should be 'they are'.