鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat clear but has some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to make your sentences more natural and avoid incomplete sentences. Also, keep your answer concise and coherent.

示例: No, I don't like buying shoes often. I only buy them when necessary because I believe having many pairs is unnecessary.

建议: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by using linking words to connect ideas smoothly and by correcting minor grammar mistakes.

示例: No, I have never bought shoes online because they sometimes don't fit well, and moreover, the no return policy of online stores makes it difficult to purchase shoes from them.

建议: Your answer has some repetition and grammatical errors. Try to structure your answer clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details, and avoid repeating words.

示例: I don't have a fixed budget for shoes. However, if I find a comfortable pair that fits well, I would probably spend around 5000.

建议: Your answer conveys your preference but has some repetition and awkward phrasing. Use linking words and clearer sentence structures to improve coherence.

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes because fashionable ones may go out of style quickly, whereas comfortable shoes last longer and I can wear them for an extended period.

× I have a very limited pair of shoes in my house because I think it is not necessary to have many pairs but.

✓ I have a very limited number of pairs of shoes in my house because I think it is not necessary to have many pairs.

The phrase 'a very limited pair of shoes' is incorrect because 'pair' is singular and 'limited' implies quantity. The correct expression is 'a very limited number of pairs' to indicate few shoes. Also, the sentence was incomplete and needed restructuring for clarity.

× I don't prefer buying shoes online because it does not fit well sometimes and the no return policy of the online retail stores makes it harder to buy shoes from them.

✓ I don't prefer buying shoes online because they do not fit well sometimes and the no-return policy of online retail stores makes it harder to buy shoes from them.

The pronoun 'it' was incorrectly used for 'shoes' which is plural, so 'they' is correct. Also, 'the no return policy of the online retail stores' should be 'the no-return policy of online retail stores' for proper noun phrase and article usage.

× I don't have fixed amount that I spent on this on buying shoes.

✓ I don't have a fixed amount that I spend on buying shoes.

The phrase 'fixed amount' requires the article 'a'. Also, 'spent' is past tense but the sentence context requires present tense 'spend' to indicate habitual action.

× I if I found the shoes comfortable and and if it fits me well then I would probably spend around 5000 for the shoes.

✓ If I find the shoes comfortable and if they fit me well, then I will probably spend around 5000 on the shoes.

The sentence has redundant 'I' and 'and', incorrect tense 'found' instead of 'find' for present/future condition, incorrect pronoun 'it' for plural 'shoes', and inconsistent verb tense with 'would' instead of 'will' for future intention.

× I don't have fixed amount that I spent on this on buying shoes.

✓ I don't have a fixed amount that I spend on buying shoes.

The preposition 'on' is correctly used before 'buying shoes', but the sentence structure was awkward. Adding 'a' before 'fixed amount' and removing redundant words improves clarity.

× for fashionable ones it might go out of style styles but for but for the comfortable ones it may run longer period of time.

✓ For fashionable ones, they might go out of style, but for comfortable ones, they may last for a longer period of time.

The pronoun 'it' was incorrectly used for plural 'ones'; 'they' is correct. Also, 'go out of style styles' is redundant; 'go out of style' suffices. 'Run longer period of time' is incorrect; 'last for a longer period of time' is appropriate.

× I can wear it longer period of time.

✓ I can wear them for a longer period of time.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect for plural 'shoes'; 'them' is correct. Also, the phrase needs the preposition 'for' and the article 'a' before 'longer period of time' for grammatical correctness.