鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to give a more direct and clear answer to the question. Also, avoid unnecessary phrases like "and all so" which make the answer less natural. You can mention how often you buy shoes to fully answer the question.

示例: No, I don't like buying shoes very often because I prefer sandals. I usually buy new shoes only once or twice a year.

建议: Focus on using correct grammar and avoid repetition. Use linking words to make your answer clearer and more natural. For example, explain your reason with 'because' and avoid repeating 'never bought'.

示例: No, I have never bought shoes online because I am worried they might not fit my feet properly.

建议: Try to give a clear and concise answer directly related to the question. Avoid filler words like 'so' and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to explain your spending habits clearly.

示例: I don't have a fixed budget for shoes. I only buy new ones when my old shoes are damaged or when I really need them.

建议: Avoid repeating the same phrase and try to combine your ideas into one clear sentence. Use linking words to show you consider both aspects.

示例: I usually prefer shoes that are both fashionable and comfortable because I want to look good and feel comfortable at the same time.

× No, I don't like buying shoes because as I'm a girl I like different types of sandals and all so.

✓ No, I don't like buying shoes because, as I'm a girl, I like different types of sandals and so on.

The conjunction 'because as' is awkward and incorrect here. It should be separated with commas and 'and all so' is informal; 'and so on' is more appropriate. Adding commas improves clarity and flow.

× No, I never I I didn't bought any shoes online because I feel that those shoes may be not sometimes may not fit in my leg or in my feet, so I never bought them online.

✓ No, I never bought any shoes online because I feel that those shoes sometimes may not fit my leg or my feet, so I never bought them online.

The phrase 'didn't bought' is incorrect; after 'didn't' the base form 'buy' should be used. Also, 'may be not sometimes may not' is redundant and awkward; 'sometimes may not' is sufficient. 'In my leg or in my feet' should be 'my leg or my feet' without 'in'.

× No, I never I I didn't bought any shoes online because I feel that those shoes may be not sometimes may not fit in my leg or in my feet, so I never bought them online.

✓ No, I never bought any shoes online because I feel that those shoes sometimes may not fit my leg or my feet, so I never bought them online.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used before 'my leg' and 'my feet'. The correct expression is 'fit my leg' or 'fit my feet' without 'in'.

× So my budget every month, my budget will be fixed, uh, for all the things. So what I buy, buy or spend on something. So if I need these shoes, then only I'll buy or if, uh, my, the old ones which I used regularly got like damaged or something like then only I buy the new shoes. So usually I.

✓ My budget every month is fixed for all things. So, I buy or spend only if I need shoes, or if the old ones I use regularly get damaged, then I buy new shoes. Usually, I...

The original sentences are fragmented and lack proper structure. Reorganizing into clear, complete sentences improves clarity and grammatical correctness. Also, 'got like damaged or something like' is informal and incorrect; 'get damaged' is correct.

× So if I need these shoes, then only I'll buy or if, uh, my, the old ones which I used regularly got like damaged or something like then only I buy the new shoes.

✓ So if I need shoes, then I will buy them, or if the old ones I use regularly get damaged, then I buy new shoes.

The pronoun usage is unclear and inconsistent. 'These shoes' should be 'shoes' generally, and 'the old ones which I used' should be 'the old ones I use'. Also, 'then only I buy the new shoes' is awkward; 'then I buy new shoes' is clearer.

× I usually prefer. I usually prefer both. Some fashionable and comfortable. I look for both.

✓ I usually prefer both fashionable and comfortable shoes. I look for both.

The original sentences are fragmented and lack clear pronoun references. Combining them into complete sentences with clear pronouns improves clarity and grammatical correctness.