鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is enthusiastic but a bit unclear and repetitive. Try to make your sentences more concise and avoid redundancy. Also, ensure correct grammar and complete your thoughts clearly. For example, mention how often you buy shoes and specify occasions more clearly.

示例: Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy them during festivals or parties, and I prefer well-known brands like Adidas and Puma because of their quality.

建议: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and lacks coherence. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, try to be more specific about your experience and avoid vague phrases like 'very good experience of mine'.

示例: Yes, I bought shoes online last month. Although the reviews gave it a 3-star rating, I decided to buy them. Fortunately, the shoes were of good quality, and I was satisfied with my purchase.

建议: Your answer is incomplete and a bit confusing. Try to give a clear and complete response with proper sentence structure. Also, avoid contradictory statements and be specific about the amount you spend.

示例: I believe quality is important, so I don't mind spending money on good shoes. Usually, I spend between 1000 to 5000 rupees on a pair.

建议: Your answer has grammar errors and some unclear phrases. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and provide specific reasons. Also, avoid repetition and ensure correct verb forms.

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes because they can be worn everywhere and on any occasion. For example, I can wear them at home or while travelling by bus, which makes them very practical.

× Moreover I love to buy shoes like on different occasions when there there are festivals and I have party.

✓ Moreover, I love to buy shoes on different occasions when there are festivals and I have a party.

The sentence had a repeated word 'there' and missed the article 'a' before 'party'. The phrase 'like on different occasions' is incorrect; 'on different occasions' is sufficient. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I would buy shoes from brands like Adidas, Puma that are very well known in my.

✓ I would buy shoes from brands like Adidas and Puma that are very well known.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'in my' which is incomplete and unclear. Also, 'like Adidas, Puma that' should be 'like Adidas and Puma that' to list brands properly. Removing 'in my' and adding 'and' corrects the sentence structure.

× Yes I have bowed shoes online last month and it was very good in quality.

✓ Yes, I bought shoes online last month and they were very good in quality.

The verb 'bowed' is incorrect; the correct past tense of 'buy' is 'bought'. Also, 'it was very good in quality' should refer to 'shoes' which is plural, so 'they were very good in quality' is correct.

× I firstly saw the reviews of the shoes and it was about 3 rating and I was very confused if I had to buy it or not but I bought it and it was a very good experience of mine.

✓ I first saw the reviews of the shoes and it had about a 3-star rating. I was very confused about whether I should buy it or not, but I bought it and it was a very good experience for me.

'Firstly' is better replaced with 'first' for naturalness. 'It was about 3 rating' is incorrect; 'it had about a 3-star rating' is correct. 'If I had to buy it or not' should be 'whether I should buy it or not'. 'Experience of mine' is unnatural; 'experience for me' is better.

× From my point of view, money does not matter if you have to buy quality products.

✓ From my point of view, money does not matter if you want to buy quality products.

'Have to buy' implies obligation, but the intended meaning is preference or desire, so 'want to buy' is more appropriate here.

× But I do not spend too much on shoes but I would say I just like spend average money on them like in 1000 to 5000 which is.

✓ But I do not spend too much on shoes; I would say I just like to spend an average amount of money on them, like between 1000 to 5000.

The sentence is awkward and incomplete. 'I just like spend' should be 'I just like to spend'. 'Average money' is better expressed as 'an average amount of money'. The phrase 'which is' is incomplete and removed for clarity.

× From my point of view, comfortable shoes are best because we can wear it at everywhere and every occasion and it it would feel as comfortable.

✓ From my point of view, comfortable shoes are best because we can wear them everywhere and on every occasion, and they would feel comfortable.

'It' is incorrect when referring to 'shoes' which is plural; 'them' and 'they' are correct. 'At everywhere' should be 'everywhere'. The phrase 'it it would feel as comfortable' is incorrect and corrected to 'they would feel comfortable'.

× Moreover, comfortable shoes could be wear at home and bus.

✓ Moreover, comfortable shoes could be worn at home and on the bus.

The verb 'wear' should be in past participle form 'worn' after 'could be'. Also, 'bus' needs the preposition 'on the' to be correct.