鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is a bit unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy. For example, mention the occasions clearly and explain briefly why you buy shoes then.

示例: Yes, I like buying shoes. I usually buy new shoes during special occasions like Eid ul-Fitr and Eid ul-Adha every year. Besides that, I also buy shoes before going on trips, such as when I went hiking in Nepal recently.

建议: Your answer has several grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to use correct expressions and be specific about your experience. Use linking words to organize your points logically.

示例: Yes, I have bought shoes online once, but it was a bad experience. The shoes did not fit my feet properly, and the color was different from what I expected. Also, the shape was strange and uncomfortable, which made me regret buying them.

建议: Your answer is confusing and has inconsistent currency references. Try to be clear and precise about the amount and currency. Use linking words to explain how you spend money on shoes during different occasions.

示例: I usually spend around 5,000 to 6,000 Bangladeshi Taka on shoes each year. Most of this money is spent during Eid ul-Fitr and Eid ul-Adha, which costs about 4,000 Taka. Occasionally, I spend around 2,000 Taka on shoes when I go on trips.

建议: Your answer shows good ideas but is repetitive and has grammar issues. Try to express your preference clearly and avoid repeating the same points. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

示例: I prefer shoes that are both fashionable and comfortable. Fashion is important to me, but if the shoes are not comfortable, then they are not worth buying. Therefore, I always choose shoes that look good and feel comfortable to wear.

× I actually buy my shoes during any occasions usually like eat back Eid, Eid UL Adha or Eid UL Fitr.

✓ I actually buy my shoes during special occasions, usually like Eid, Eid UL Adha, or Eid UL Fitr.

The phrase 'any occasions' is incorrect because 'any' is not appropriate here; 'special occasions' or 'certain occasions' fits better. Also, 'eat back Eid' seems to be a mishearing or typo; it should be 'Eid'. The plural 'occasions' is correct here because multiple events are mentioned.

× I every year I buy my own shoes and except that I buy my shoes before going on trips especially I bought these shoes before going on the hike.

✓ Every year, I buy my own shoes, and besides that, I buy shoes before going on trips. Especially, I bought these shoes before going on a hike.

The phrase 'except that' is incorrectly used; 'besides that' or 'apart from that' is more appropriate. Also, 'on the hike' should be 'on a hike' because it refers to a nonspecific hike. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× I went on Nepal this year.

✓ I went to Nepal this year.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect with 'Nepal'; the correct preposition is 'to' when referring to going to a country. The past tense 'went' is correct.

× Yes, I once bought shoes online and that was the worst experience of my life because that didn't feed my legs and that was the old color combination.

✓ Yes, I once bought shoes online and that was the worst experience of my life because they didn't fit my feet and the color combination was old.

The phrase 'didn't feed my legs' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'didn't fit my feet'. Also, 'that was the old color combination' is awkward; 'the color combination was old' is better. 'They' is used for shoes as plural pronoun.

× I thought that was the brown color, but when I got the shoe that was not as brown at all and that was weird in shape that did not fit at all and that hurt my.

✓ I thought it was brown, but when I got the shoes, they were not brown at all and had a weird shape. They did not fit at all and hurt me.

'That' is incorrectly used repeatedly; 'it' or 'they' are better pronouns for shoes. 'That hurt my' is incomplete; it should be 'hurt me'. Also, 'the brown color' is better as just 'brown'. The sentence is split for clarity.

× I think I spent 5 to 6000 every year to buy my shoes actually I buy as I said during Eidullah and Eid UL Fitr, so that takes up more than like 4000 and occasionally I buy shoes when I go on trips that takes more 2000 dollars, 2000 BDT actually.

✓ I think I spend 5,000 to 6,000 BDT every year to buy my shoes. Actually, I buy them during Eid UL Adha and Eid UL Fitr, which costs more than 4,000 BDT. Occasionally, I buy shoes when I go on trips, which costs more than 2,000 BDT.

The verb tense is corrected to present tense 'spend' to match habitual action. Numbers are clarified with commas and currency. 'Takes up more than like 4000' is corrected to 'costs more than 4,000 BDT'. The sentence is split for clarity and correct quantifier use.

× I prefer both. Passion is actually very important for me. But if it is not comfortable then like what is fashion right?

✓ I prefer both. Fashion is actually very important to me. But if it is not comfortable, then what is fashion, right?

'Passion' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'fashion'. Also, 'important for me' is better as 'important to me'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and meaning.

× So I I when I buy shoes I like to I like the fashionable shoes but I make sure they are comfortable.

✓ So, when I buy shoes, I like fashionable shoes, but I make sure they are comfortable.

The sentence has repeated words and awkward phrasing. Removing extra 'I' and restructuring improves clarity. 'I like the fashionable shoes' is better as 'I like fashionable shoes'.

× Unless they are comfortable I don't buy them but but even if they are comfortable that if they don't look fashionable.

✓ Unless they are comfortable, I don't buy them. But even if they are comfortable, if they don't look fashionable, I won't buy them.

The sentence is run-on and confusing. Adding commas and splitting into two sentences improves clarity. The phrase 'but but' is corrected to single 'but'. The conditional structure is clarified.