鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more structured and clear. Start with a direct response, then add specific reasons using linking words. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like "I by myself". Also, keep your answer within 5 sentences.

示例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes online because it is more convenient and cheaper than physical stores. However, I only buy shoes when I have extra money. Sometimes, I hesitate because I wonder if I really need them. Overall, I prefer online shopping for shoes due to the discounts and variety.

建议: Your answer is relevant but repetitive. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid repeating phrases. Also, try to be more concise and clear in your explanation.

示例: Yes, I always buy shoes online because they are more affordable than in physical stores. Moreover, I take advantage of big discounts during holidays, which makes shopping even better.

建议: Your answer is incomplete and lacks coherence. Provide a complete sentence with clear linking words. Also, specify the frequency and factors affecting your spending to enrich your answer.

示例: I usually spend around 500 to 1000 pesos on shoes, depending on the brand. I buy shoes about twice a year, usually when I find good deals or need new ones.

建议: Your answer has good ideas but some parts are unclear and repetitive. Use linking words to connect your points and avoid mistakes like "if the boat and my clothes are the same color". Be specific and clear.

示例: I prefer shoes that are both fashionable and comfortable because they match my clothes and boost my confidence. For example, when my shoes and outfit have the same color, I feel more confident.

× However, I by myself when I have extra money but if I don't have I don't know.

✓ However, I buy by myself when I have extra money, but if I don't have, I don't know.

The sentence is missing the verb 'buy' after 'I'. The pronoun 'I' needs a verb to complete the sentence. Adding 'buy' clarifies the action. Also, a comma is needed before 'but' to separate the clauses.

× Yes I always I always buy shoes online because it's cheaper or it's affordable than physical store and also it's I buy shoes when it gives a lot of discount especially on the holiday and the shop give this big discount.

✓ Yes, I always buy shoes online because it's cheaper or more affordable than physical stores, and also I buy shoes when there are a lot of discounts, especially on holidays when the shop gives big discounts.

The sentence has repeated 'I always' and missing commas. 'Physical store' should be plural 'physical stores' to match the comparison. 'It gives a lot of discount' is incorrect; it should be 'there are a lot of discounts' or 'the shop gives big discounts'. Also, 'holiday' should be plural 'holidays' to generalize. The verb 'give' should be 'gives' to agree with singular 'shop'.

× The money that I usually spend is around 500 to 1000 pesos. It depends of the brand of the shoes and I bought twice a year and also.

✓ The money that I usually spend is around 500 to 1000 pesos. It depends on the brand of the shoes, and I buy twice a year as well.

The phrase 'depends of' is incorrect; it should be 'depends on'. Also, 'I bought twice a year' is incorrect tense and structure; it should be 'I buy twice a year'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'and also', so 'as well' is added for completeness.

× I prefer both fashionable and comfortable shoes because it allows me to to pair the the clothes or the apparel that I wear and also it helps me to boost my confidence if the boat and my clothes are the same color.

✓ I prefer both fashionable and comfortable shoes because they allow me to pair the clothes or apparel that I wear, and also they help me boost my confidence if the shoes and my clothes are the same color.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect when referring to plural 'shoes'; it should be 'they'. The word 'boat' is likely a typo and should be 'shoes'. Also, repeated words like 'to to' and 'the the' are corrected. The sentence is adjusted for clarity and correct pronoun agreement.