鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is understandable but needs to be more natural and clear. Try to avoid awkward phrasing like "I have found buying shoes twice a year" and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, keep your answer concise and avoid redundancy.

示例: Yes, I like buying shoes and usually do so twice a year. My favorite brand is Nike because their shoes make walking and running very comfortable.

建议: Your answer has some repetition and grammatical errors. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Also, avoid repeating phrases like "for ceremony" and use correct articles.

示例: Yes, I have bought shoes online twice. For my school ceremony, I needed new shoes, so I purchased a pair at a very affordable price. They are durable, and I am very satisfied with them.

建议: Your answer is unclear and repetitive. Try to give a direct response first, then explain with specific details using linking words. Avoid repeating phrases like "so it depends" multiple times.

示例: The amount I spend on shoes depends on the occasion. For special events like ceremonies, I buy shoes that are appropriate for the event, which might cost more than casual shoes.

建议: Your answer is confusing and contains many errors. Try to clearly state your preference and explain why using simple and correct sentences. Avoid unnecessary repetition and unclear phrases.

示例: I prefer to buy and wear fashionable shoes because I like how they look. However, I also consider comfort to make sure the shoes fit me well.

× I have found buying shoes twice a year and the brand Nike is the brand that I like most because it makes me easy to walk and run also.

✓ I have found myself buying shoes twice a year and the brand Nike is the brand that I like most because it makes it easy for me to walk and run.

The phrase 'I have found buying shoes' is awkward; adding 'myself' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'makes me easy to walk and run' is incorrect; it should be 'makes it easy for me to walk and run' to correctly express the idea. Additionally, 'shoes' is plural and used correctly here.

× I had to buy a shoes and I bought a shoes in a very cheap price and it is so durable so I'm happy with that.

✓ I had to buy shoes and I bought shoes at a very cheap price and they are so durable so I'm happy with that.

The word 'shoes' is plural and should not be preceded by 'a'. Also, 'a shoes' is incorrect; it should be 'shoes' without an article. 'In a very cheap price' should be 'at a very cheap price' to use the correct preposition.

× I had to buy a shoes and I bought a shoes in a very cheap price and it is so durable so I'm happy with that.

✓ I had to buy shoes and I bought shoes at a very cheap price and they are so durable so I'm happy with that.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to price; the correct preposition is 'at' as in 'at a very cheap price'. Also, 'a shoes' is incorrect as 'shoes' is plural and does not take 'a'.

× I had to buy a shoes and I bought a shoes in a very cheap price and it is so durable so I'm happy with that.

✓ I had to buy shoes and I bought shoes at a very cheap price and they are so durable so I'm happy with that.

The pronoun 'it' refers to 'shoes' which is plural, so it should be 'they are so durable' instead of 'it is so durable'.

× I think it depends on the situation as if I need shoes if there is some kind of ceremonies, so I have to buy it with the event appropriate, so I buy it with the time.

✓ I think it depends on the situation; if I need shoes for some kind of ceremony, I have to buy ones appropriate for the event, so I buy them at the right time.

The preposition 'with' is incorrectly used; it should be 'for' when referring to ceremonies and 'appropriate for the event'. Also, 'buy it with the time' is unclear; 'buy them at the right time' is more appropriate.

× I prefer to wear and buy a fashionable shoes than a comfortable shoes.

✓ I prefer to wear and buy fashionable shoes rather than comfortable shoes.

'Shoes' is plural, so it should not be preceded by 'a'. Also, 'than' is used for comparison, so 'rather than' is more appropriate here.

× It's it is not like I I, I would like to sew my shoes, but it is kind of the thing that it should be suits on me.

✓ It's not like I would like to sew my shoes, but it's kind of a thing that it should suit me.

The sentence has redundant words and incorrect conjunctions. 'It's it is not like I I, I' is redundant and should be simplified. Also, 'should be suits on me' is incorrect; it should be 'should suit me'.

× So I prefer to buy a fashionable suit with.

✓ So I prefer to buy a fashionable suit.

The preposition 'with' at the end is unnecessary and incorrect in this context and should be removed.