鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が見られます。例えば、「Maybe for a year I bought my shoes twice or three times」は「I buy shoes two or three times a year」のように自然な表現に改善できます。また、理由の説明ももう少し具体的にし、接続詞を使って文をつなげると良いでしょう。

示例: Yes, I like buying shoes and usually buy them two or three times a year. I especially enjoy choosing soccer shoes because I used to play soccer and appreciate the comfort and style they offer.

建议: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法ミスや不自然な表現が多いです。例えば、「I don't like my my shoes on online」は「I don't like buying shoes online」に修正が必要です。また、理由を明確にし、接続詞を使って論理的に説明すると良いでしょう。

示例: Yes, I have bought shoes online only once or twice because I prefer to see and try the shoes in person. This way, I can check the size and design carefully to avoid mistakes, since returning shoes can be difficult.

建议: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法と語彙の誤りがあります。例えば、「I always use my more than ¥5000」は「I usually spend more than ¥5000」に修正が必要です。また、理由をより具体的にし、接続詞を使って文をつなげると良いでしょう。

示例: I usually spend more than ¥5000 on shoes because I believe that good shoes are important for both fashion and foot health, so it's worth investing in quality footwear.

建议: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。例えば、「It's difficult to question」は「It's a difficult question」に修正し、「Success is one of fashion and outfit」は意味が不明瞭なので、より明確な理由を述べると良いでしょう。

示例: It's a difficult question, but I think both fashionable and comfortable shoes are important. Fashionable shoes help me look good, while comfortable shoes make it easier to walk and stay active.

× Maybe for a year I bought my shoes twice or three times.

✓ Maybe in a year I buy shoes twice or three times.

The original sentence incorrectly uses the past tense 'bought' when the context suggests a habitual action over a period of time, which requires the present tense 'buy'. Also, 'for a year' is better expressed as 'in a year' to indicate frequency within a year.

× Maybe for a year I bought my shoes twice or three times.

✓ Maybe in a year I buy shoes twice or three times.

The preposition 'for' is incorrectly used to indicate frequency within a time period. 'In a year' is the correct prepositional phrase to express how often something happens within a year.

× I don't like my my shoes on online because we can check the size or designs on my eyes so if I had a mistake I can't change the shoes.

✓ I don't like buying shoes online because we can't check the size or designs with our own eyes, so if I make a mistake, I can't change the shoes.

The sentence has repeated 'my', incorrect preposition 'on online' instead of 'online', and incorrect pronoun usage 'my eyes' instead of 'our own eyes'. Also, tense inconsistency with 'had' instead of 'make'. These errors affect clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I don't like my my shoes on online because we can check the size or designs on my eyes so if I had a mistake I can't change the shoes.

✓ I don't like buying shoes online because we can't check the size or designs with our own eyes, so if I make a mistake, I can't change the shoes.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used before 'online'. The correct phrase is 'buying shoes online' without a preposition or with 'on' only in specific contexts, but here 'online' functions as an adverb.

× if I had a mistake I can't change the shoes.

✓ if I make a mistake, I can't change the shoes.

The conditional clause requires the present tense 'make' to express a general condition, not the past tense 'had'. Also, a comma is needed after the conditional clause for clarity.

× I always use my more than ¥5000 to buy shoes because I think shoes is very important of fashion and my health, so I have to spend a lot of money to buy my shoes.

✓ I always spend more than ¥5000 to buy shoes because I think shoes are very important for fashion and my health, so I have to spend a lot of money to buy my shoes.

The verb 'use' is incorrect here; 'spend' is appropriate for money. 'Shoes is' is incorrect; 'shoes' is plural and requires 'are'. The preposition 'of' after 'important' is incorrect; 'for' is correct.

× I think shoes is very important of fashion and my health, so I have to spend a lot of money to buy my shoes.

✓ I think shoes are very important for fashion and my health, so I have to spend a lot of money to buy my shoes.

The preposition 'of' is incorrectly used after 'important'. The correct preposition is 'for' to indicate the area in which something is important.

× I think shoes is very important of fashion and my health, so I have to spend a lot of money to buy my shoes.

✓ I think shoes are very important for fashion and my health, so I have to spend a lot of money to buy my shoes.

The subject 'shoes' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number.

× It's difficult to question, but I think the both are very important because.

✓ It's a difficult question, but I think both are very important because...

The phrase 'difficult to question' is incorrect; it should be 'a difficult question'. 'The both' is incorrect; 'both' alone is correct. The sentence ends abruptly with 'because' without completing the thought.

× Also comfortable shoes helps me to walk.

✓ Also, comfortable shoes help me to walk.

The subject 'shoes' is plural, so the verb should be 'help' instead of 'helps'. A comma after 'Also' improves readability.