鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cevaplarınızda daha doğal ve akıcı ifadeler kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, cümle yapılarınızı basit ve etkili tutarak gereksiz tekrarları önleyin. Örneğin, "I usually buy a new pair of shoes once a year because I don't wear them often. After a year, they become uncomfortable, so I throw them away." gibi daha net ve doğal cümleler kurabilirsiniz.

示例: I usually buy a new pair of shoes once a year because I don't wear them very often. After a year, they become uncomfortable, so I throw them away.

建议: Cümlelerinizde anlam bütünlüğünü sağlamak için bağlaçlar kullanmalısınız ve kelime seçimlerinizi daha dikkatli yapmalısınız. Örneğin, "I usually buy shoes online because I find it difficult to choose the right pair in the mall, and it's more convenient for me." gibi daha akıcı ve anlamlı ifadeler tercih edin.

示例: I usually buy shoes online because I find it difficult to choose the right pair in the mall, and it's more convenient for me.

建议: Daha spesifik ve doğru ifadeler kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizi daha akıcı hale getirmek için bağlaçlar ekleyin. Örneğin, "I usually spend about 5000 once a year because I prefer original shoes. I avoid fake ones since they can hurt your feet, as I read in an article." gibi ifadeler kullanabilirsiniz.

示例: I usually spend about 5000 once a year because I prefer original shoes. I avoid fake ones since they can hurt your feet, as I read in an article.

建议: Cümlelerinizi daha doğal ve akıcı hale getirmek için bağlaçlar ve uygun kelimeler kullanmalısınız. Örneğin, "It depends on the day; I wear fashionable shoes when I go out with friends, but I prefer comfortable shoes for errands like grocery shopping." gibi ifadeler daha etkili olur.

示例: It depends on the day; I wear fashionable shoes when I go out with friends, but I prefer comfortable shoes for errands like grocery shopping.

× I don't like to buy shoes very often because the current economic difficulties.

✓ I don't like to buy shoes very often because of the current economic difficulties.

The sentence is missing the preposition 'of' after 'because' to correctly link the reason. The phrase should be 'because of the current economic difficulties.'

× Usually I buy new shoe once in a year and it is enough for me because I don't wear them very frequently.

✓ Usually I buy new shoes once a year and it is enough for me because I don't wear them very frequently.

The noun 'shoe' should be plural 'shoes' because it refers to more than one item. Also, 'once in a year' is better expressed as 'once a year.'

× After wearing them for a year it became so very uncomfortable.

✓ After wearing them for a year, they became very uncomfortable.

The subject 'it' is incorrect; it should be 'they' to refer to 'shoes.' Also, 'so very' is redundant; 'very' suffices. The verb 'became' is correctly in past tense.

× That's why I throw them in the garbage.

✓ That's why I throw them away in the garbage.

The phrase 'throw them in the garbage' is understandable but 'throw them away' is more natural. Alternatively, 'throw them in the garbage bin' would be correct.

× I usually buy my shoes online because I'm a bit lazy to go to to the mall and I find it difficult to choose and write pair.

✓ I usually buy my shoes online because I'm a bit lazy to go to the mall and I find it difficult to choose the right pair.

The phrase 'to to the mall' has a repeated preposition 'to.' Also, 'write pair' is incorrect; it should be 'right pair.'

× It is very difficult for me and I think buying it online it is very useful and it is very comfortable.

✓ It is very difficult for me and I think buying online is very useful and very comfortable.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrectly used twice; 'buying it online it is' is redundant. The correct form is 'buying online is.'

× Approximately 5000 once a year because I usually buy original shoe and I don't like to choose fake shoes because there is a side effect.

✓ Approximately 5000 once a year because I usually buy original shoes and I don't like to choose fake shoes because there are side effects.

The noun 'shoe' should be plural 'shoes' to match 'fake shoes.' Also, 'there is a side effect' should be plural 'there are side effects' because multiple effects are implied.

× It can hurt your foot and it can bleed your foot.

✓ It can hurt your foot and it can cause your foot to bleed.

The verb 'bleed' is incorrectly used transitively. The correct expression is 'cause your foot to bleed.'

× I read from a article.

✓ I read from an article.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a vowel sound, as in 'an article.'

× It changes to my day because I wear fashionable shoes when I go outside with my friends, but if I need to go grocery or I have to buy some meat, I usually wear comfortable shoes.

✓ It depends on my day because I wear fashionable shoes when I go out with my friends, but if I need to go grocery shopping or buy some meat, I usually wear comfortable shoes.

The phrase 'It changes to my day' is incorrect; 'It depends on my day' is better. Also, 'go outside' should be 'go out.' The phrase 'go grocery' is incomplete; it should be 'go grocery shopping.'