鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of 'I definitely will pay the visit to the shoe stores by looking at their designs, follow up with the new trends,' you can say 'I usually visit shoe stores to check out new designs and trends.'

示例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, especially when I visit shopping malls. I usually check out the latest designs and trends, but I don't buy shoes every time because I have to manage my budget carefully.

建议: Improve grammar and clarity. Avoid repetition and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, clarify what 'PERS' means or avoid abbreviations. For example, say 'I bought shoes online once, but the seller sent the wrong size and color, so I will be more careful next time.'

示例: Yes, I have bought shoes online once, but it was disappointing because the seller sent the wrong size and color. Therefore, I will be more careful when making online purchases in the future.

建议: Your answer is good but can be improved by using better linking words and more natural phrasing. For example, instead of 'that have the characteristic of both durable and comfortable,' say 'that are both durable and comfortable.'

示例: I usually spend quite a bit of money on shoes because I prefer to invest in good quality ones rather than cheap shoes that wear out quickly. For instance, I often buy sandals, sports shoes, and sneakers that are both durable and comfortable.

建议: Good answer with clear opinion and reasons. To improve, use plural form correctly and add linking words for coherence. For example, say 'comfortable and durable shoes are very important to support me during long walks.'

示例: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes. Although fashionable shoes look nice, I prioritize comfort because I enjoy traveling a lot. Therefore, comfortable and durable shoes are very important to support me during long walks.

× I love buying shoes, especially when I go to shopping mall.

✓ I love buying shoes, especially when I go to the shopping mall.

In English, when referring to a specific place like 'shopping mall', the definite article 'the' is required. Omitting 'the' before 'shopping mall' is incorrect usage of the definite article (Grammar Problem Type ID: 17).

× I definitely will pay the visit to the shoe stores by looking at their designs, follow up with the new trends.

✓ I definitely will pay a visit to the shoe stores to look at their designs and follow up with the new trends.

The phrase 'pay the visit' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'pay a visit'. Also, 'by looking' should be 'to look' to express purpose. Additionally, 'follow up with' should be connected properly with 'and' to join the actions. This involves incorrect use of prepositions and conjunctions (Grammar Problem Type IDs: 11 and 16).

× But I didn't buy shoes every time I go to the store because of my budget.

✓ But I don't buy shoes every time I go to the store because of my budget.

The sentence talks about habitual action in the present, so present tense 'don't buy' is appropriate instead of past tense 'didn't buy'. Mixing past tense with present habitual action is incorrect (Grammar Problem Type ID: 5).

× Yes, I've bought for once and it was a very disappointing experience because the seller sent me a wrong size and color that I wanted.

✓ Yes, I've bought once and it was a very disappointing experience because the seller sent me the wrong size and color that I wanted.

The phrase 'bought for once' is incorrect; 'bought once' is correct. Also, 'a wrong size' should be 'the wrong size' because it refers to a specific wrong size and color. This is incorrect use of quantifiers and articles (Grammar Problem Type IDs: 14 and 22).

× So I think I will be more careful next for my next PERS purchase.

✓ So I think I will be more careful next time for my next PERS purchase.

The phrase 'next for my next' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'next time for my next'. This is incorrect use of pronouns and adverbial phrases (Grammar Problem Type ID: 12).

× Usually I will spend quite a bit of money on shoes because I prefer to invest in the good ones instead of the cheaper ones that might wear out quickly.

✓ Usually I spend quite a bit of money on shoes because I prefer to invest in the good ones instead of the cheaper ones that might wear out quickly.

The adverb 'usually' indicates habitual action, so simple present tense 'I spend' is appropriate rather than future tense 'I will spend'. Using future tense here is incorrect (Grammar Problem Type ID: 7).

× So I usually buy sandals, sports shoes and sneakers that have the characteristic of both durable and comfortable.

✓ So I usually buy sandals, sports shoes and sneakers that have the characteristics of being both durable and comfortable.

The phrase 'characteristic of both durable and comfortable' is incorrect. It should be 'characteristics of being both durable and comfortable' to correctly use adjectives and noun forms. This is incorrect use of adjectives (Grammar Problem Type ID: 13).

× So a comfortable and durable shoes is very important for me to support during the long walks.

✓ So comfortable and durable shoes are very important for me to support me during long walks.

The subject 'shoes' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'. Also, 'a' should not be used before plural 'shoes'. Additionally, 'to support during the long walks' is unclear; adding 'me' clarifies the meaning. This is a singular and plural issue and subject-verb agreement error (Grammar Problem Type IDs: 1 and 27).