鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup baik, tetapi ada beberapa pengulangan kata dan penggunaan kata yang kurang tepat seperti 'for once in a month'. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat lebih alami dan efektif dengan menghindari pengulangan dan menggunakan frasa yang tepat.

示例: I don't really enjoy buying new shoes and usually purchase them once or twice a year. However, my mother buys new shoes about once a month because she likes to keep up with the latest trends.

建议: Jawaban Anda sudah jelas, tetapi ada pengulangan kata 'the' dan kalimat bisa dibuat lebih lancar dengan penggunaan linking words yang tepat. Perhatikan juga struktur kalimat agar lebih natural.

示例: Yes, I have. I saw shoe ads on Instagram that I couldn't find in physical stores, so I decided to buy them online after researching their quality and size.

建议: Jawaban Anda kurang tepat dalam penggunaan kata dan struktur kalimat, seperti '1 until 2 million' dan 'shoes that cheaper than that'. Cobalah menggunakan frasa yang lebih tepat dan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur.

示例: I usually spend between one and two million rupiahs on shoes because I consider factors like quality, brand, and size. However, nowadays there are many shoes available at lower prices.

建议: Jawaban Anda sudah mengandung alasan, tetapi ada kesalahan tata bahasa dan penggunaan kata seperti 'and but' dan 'fashionable 1'. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan kohesif dengan linking words yang tepat.

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I don't like my feet to feel uncomfortable or itchy due to the material. However, fashionable shoes are my second choice.

× she can buy new shoes for once in a month because she enjoys to keep up the trend

✓ she can buy new shoes once a month because she enjoys keeping up with the trend

The phrase 'for once in a month' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'once a month'. Also, 'enjoys to keep up' is incorrect because 'enjoy' should be followed by a gerund (-ing form), so it should be 'enjoys keeping up'. Additionally, 'keep up the trend' should be 'keep up with the trend' to use the correct preposition.

× I have seen the the shoes ads in Instagram and I can't find it anywhere offline

✓ I have seen the shoe ads on Instagram and I can't find them anywhere offline

The phrase 'the the' is a repetition error. 'Shoes ads' should be 'shoe ads' because 'shoe' acts as an adjective here. 'In Instagram' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on Instagram'. Also, 'it' refers to 'ads' which is plural, so it should be 'them'.

× So I decided to buy the shoes online by doing some research first about the quality and the size

✓ So I decided to buy the shoes online after doing some research first about the quality and the size

The phrase 'by doing some research first' is awkward. Using 'after doing some research' is more natural to indicate the sequence of actions.

× I think my budget is 1 until 2 million because I consider the quality also the brand and the size

✓ I think my budget is between 1 and 2 million because I consider the quality, the brand, and the size

The phrase '1 until 2 million' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'between 1 and 2 million'. Also, 'consider the quality also the brand and the size' should be 'consider the quality, the brand, and the size' to list items properly.

× But now there are a lot of shoes that cheaper than that

✓ But now there are a lot of shoes that are cheaper than that

The sentence is missing the verb 'are' before 'cheaper'. The correct structure is 'shoes that are cheaper than that'.

× My preference is comfortable shoes because I don't like my feet feeling uncomfortable or being itchy because of the material and but my second preference is the fashionable 1

✓ My preference is comfortable shoes because I don't like my feet feeling uncomfortable or itchy because of the material, but my second preference is fashionable ones

The phrase 'and but' is incorrect; it should be just 'but'. Also, 'the fashionable 1' is incorrect; it should be 'fashionable ones' to refer to shoes in plural form. The word 'being' before 'itchy' is unnecessary and can be omitted.