鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is a bit long and has some grammatical errors which affect clarity. Try to keep your answer concise and directly answer the question with clear sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid redundancy.

示例: Yes, I like buying shoes quite often because I enjoy collecting different designs and brands. Whenever I get the chance, I usually buy new shoes to add to my collection.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and repetitions. Try to organize your thoughts before speaking and use linking words to explain your opinion clearly. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and repeat words.

示例: Yes, I have bought shoes online before. However, sometimes the shoes look different in person compared to the pictures online, so I am a bit cautious about buying shoes from online stores.

建议: Your answer provides relevant details but the numbers are a bit confusing and the sentence structure can be improved. Try to use clear and simple sentences with correct number expressions and linking words to compare.

示例: I usually spend between 4,000 and 10,000 taka on shoes. For local brands, I spend around 4,000 to 5,000 taka, but for foreign brands, the price can go up to 15,000 taka.

建议: Your answer is confusing and contains contradictory statements. Make sure to clearly state your preference and support it with reasons and examples. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

示例: I prefer both fashionable and comfortable shoes depending on the situation. For example, I wear fashionable shoes when I go out with friends, but I choose comfortable shoes for work because I need to wear them for long hours.

× I have very high interest in buying different kind of shoes.

✓ I have a very high interest in buying different kinds of shoes.

The noun 'interest' needs an article 'a' before it, and 'kind' should be plural 'kinds' because it refers to multiple types of shoes.

× Whenever I got an opportunity to purchase shoes, I actually went for it because I have the passion to collect shoes from various design and as well as from brands I whenever even if I used in our country.

✓ Whenever I get an opportunity to purchase shoes, I actually go for it because I have the passion to collect shoes from various designs as well as from brands, even if I use them in our country.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses incorrectly. 'Got' and 'went' should be present tense 'get' and 'go' to match the habitual action. 'Design' should be plural 'designs'. The sentence structure is also corrected for clarity.

× I really buy buy shoes from the online platform because, uh, I sometimes I have a feeling that, uh, the product we seen in the online and in person, uh, kind of uh, varies because that's the point that opt me out from buying through the online platform, yet I had purchased one from.

✓ I rarely buy shoes from online platforms because sometimes I feel that the product we see online and in person varies, and that's the reason that stops me from buying through online platforms, although I have purchased one before.

'Really buy buy' is a repetition error and should be 'rarely buy'. 'The online platform' should be 'online platforms' without 'the'. 'We seen' is incorrect; it should be 'we see'. 'Opt me out' is incorrect; 'stops me' is appropriate. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Easily I spend around 4000 to 10,000 taka for purchasing shoes.

✓ I usually spend around 4000 to 10,000 taka on purchasing shoes.

The adverb 'Easily' is incorrectly used; 'usually' fits better. The preposition 'for' should be 'on' when talking about spending money.

× Although that depends on the brands.

✓ Although that depends on the brand.

'Brands' should be singular 'brand' here because it refers to the general category, and the sentence is better connected to the previous one.

× If I purchase the local shoes then I spend around 4000 or 5000.

✓ If I purchase local shoes, then I spend around 4000 or 5000.

'The local shoes' is incorrect; 'local shoes' without 'the' is appropriate when speaking generally.

× In contrast while I buy the foreign brand shoes in that case I spend around 10,012 thousand or something is 15,000.

✓ In contrast, when I buy foreign brand shoes, I spend around 10,000 to 15,000 taka.

'The foreign brand shoes' should be 'foreign brand shoes' without 'the'. The number '10,012 thousand' is incorrect and confusing; it should be '10,000 to 15,000' for clarity.

× I usually buy both fashionable shoes as well as the comfortable shoes because in some cases I prefer wiring the fashionable shoes which give me different sort of feeling.

✓ I usually buy both fashionable shoes as well as comfortable shoes because in some cases I prefer wearing fashionable shoes which give me a different sort of feeling.

'Wiring' is a typo and should be 'wearing'. 'The comfortable shoes' should be 'comfortable shoes' without 'the'. 'Different sort of feeling' needs an article 'a' before 'different'.

× For example, when I went to work, I preferred the comfortable.

✓ For example, when I go to work, I prefer comfortable shoes.

The sentence should be in present tense to match habitual action. 'Went' and 'preferred' should be 'go' and 'prefer'. Also, 'the comfortable' is incomplete; it should be 'comfortable shoes'.