鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to use correct verb forms and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Also, make your sentences clearer and more concise by directly stating your habits. For example, say 'I like buying shoes and usually buy them only when I need to replace old ones.'

示例: Yes, I like buying shoes and usually purchase them only when my old ones are worn out. I prefer buying from a nearby store in my hometown for convenience.

建议: Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, say 'Yes, I have bought shoes online several times. Last month, I ordered two pairs from Flipkart, a popular app in my country. However, I sometimes face difficulties when ordering shoes and clothes online.'

示例: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times. Last month, I ordered two pairs from Flipkart, which is a popular app in my country. However, I sometimes face difficulties when ordering shoes and clothes online, such as size issues.

建议: Use clearer and grammatically correct sentences. Avoid filler words and be specific about your spending habits. For example, say 'I usually spend within my budget and prefer affordable yet good quality shoes.'

示例: I usually spend within my budget and prefer affordable yet good quality shoes. I don't like to spend a lot just to show off my financial status.

建议: Try to avoid filler words and improve sentence flow by using linking words. Also, correct grammar and word choice will help. For example, say 'It depends on the occasion. On a daily basis, I prefer comfortable shoes because they help me stay productive. However, for weddings or birthday parties, I choose fashionable shoes to look attractive.'

示例: It depends on the occasion. On a daily basis, I prefer comfortable shoes because they help me stay productive, such as when I go to my institute or play with friends. However, for weddings or birthday parties, I choose fashionable shoes to look attractive.

× Yes, I like to buying shoes and I usually buying shoes only whenever I need it.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes and I usually buy shoes only whenever I need them.

The verb 'like' should be followed by the gerund form 'buying' not 'to buying'. Also, 'usually buying' is incorrect; it should be 'usually buy' as 'usually' is an adverb modifying the verb in base form. Additionally, 'it' is incorrect when referring to plural 'shoes'; 'them' should be used.

× When my old shoes not uh, working, I meant to uh not properly usable, then I get priority to buying shoes uh, from near store my hometown.

✓ When my old shoes are not working properly, I prioritize buying shoes from a nearby store in my hometown.

The sentence lacks the auxiliary verb 'are' for the present tense negative 'are not working'. 'I meant to uh not properly usable' is unclear and incorrect; it should be simplified to 'not working properly'. 'I get priority to buying shoes' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'I prioritize buying shoes'. Also, 'from near store my hometown' should be 'from a nearby store in my hometown' to use correct prepositions and article.

× As it's many time when I uh, purchased shoes from online manner, I remember it was the last month when I ordered two pair of shoes from Flipkart that uh that are popular application in my country.

✓ I have purchased shoes online many times. I remember last month when I ordered two pairs of shoes from Flipkart, which is a popular application in my country.

The phrase 'As it's many time when I uh, purchased' is incorrect; it should be 'I have purchased shoes online many times' to express experience. 'Two pair' should be 'two pairs' for plural. 'That uh that are popular application' should be 'which is a popular application' to correctly refer to Flipkart.

× But I faced difficulties if I order shoes and clothes product from online.

✓ But I face difficulties when I order shoes and clothes products online.

The phrase 'if I order' is incorrect; 'when I order' is appropriate to indicate habitual action. 'From online' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'online' without 'from'. Also, 'clothes product' should be pluralized to 'clothes products'.

× To be honest, I am not a person who show financial status to spend on different quality shoes.

✓ To be honest, I am not a person who shows off financial status by spending on different quality shoes.

The verb 'show' should be 'shows' to agree with singular subject 'person'. Also, 'show financial status to spend' is awkward; 'shows off financial status by spending' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Uh, but I like to purchase that shoes that in my budget and that are effective and cheap.

✓ But I like to purchase shoes that are within my budget and that are effective and cheap.

'That shoes' is incorrect; 'those shoes' or simply 'shoes' should be used. 'That in my budget' is incorrect; it should be 'that are within my budget' to use correct preposition and verb agreement.

× Well, it depends on the situations and the occasion.

✓ Well, it depends on the situation and the occasion.

'Situations' should be singular 'situation' to match 'occasion' which is singular. Also, 'depends on' is correct preposition usage here.

× On my daily basis, I like to wear comfortable shoes that make me a more, uh, productive throughout my work, uh, like uh, going on my institute and playing with my friends.

✓ On a daily basis, I like to wear comfortable shoes that make me more productive throughout my work, like going to my institute and playing with my friends.

'On my daily basis' should be 'On a daily basis'. 'Make me a more productive' is incorrect; 'make me more productive' is correct. 'Going on my institute' should be 'going to my institute' to use correct preposition.

× But on marriage, on birthday parties, I get prioritized or to fashionable, so that make me more attractive.

✓ But at marriages and birthday parties, I prioritize fashionable shoes, so that I look more attractive.

'On marriage' should be 'at marriages'. 'I get prioritized or to fashionable' is incorrect; it should be 'I prioritize fashionable shoes'. 'So that make me' should be 'so that I look' for subject-verb agreement and clarity.