鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and clear, and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically. For example, you can say, "I don't shop often, but I like to buy shoes on special occasions such as festivals because I want to look elegant."

示例: I don't shop for shoes very often, but I usually buy them on special occasions like festivals or family gatherings because I want to look elegant during those times.

建议: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to use correct sentence structures and vocabulary. Also, avoid unnecessary details that confuse the listener. Use linking words to make your answer coherent. For example, "I haven't bought shoes online because I think many websites are fraudulent. For instance, my close friend was scammed after buying shoes from social media."

示例: I haven't bought shoes online because I believe many websites are not trustworthy. For example, my close friend was scammed after purchasing shoes through a social media seller.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to answer directly with specific details and avoid vague phrases. Use linking words to connect your ideas. For example, "I am a frugal person, so I only spend money on shoes when I really need them or during special occasions like Dashain or Tihar."

示例: I am a frugal person, so I usually spend money on shoes only when I really need them or during special occasions such as Dashain or Tihar.

建议: Your answer is generally good but has some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to use correct grammar and avoid repeating words. Use linking words to make your answer coherent. For example, "It depends on the occasion. For special events like my college's annual program, I prefer formal shoes. However, for casual wear or sports, I choose comfortable shoes."

示例: It depends on the occasion. For special events like my college's annual program, I prefer formal shoes. However, for casual wear or sports, I choose comfortable shoes.

× I like to buy shoes on my body or any occasions like festivals because I want to look elegant and that those times.

✓ I like to buy shoes for my body or on any occasions like festivals because I want to look elegant at those times.

The prepositions 'on' and 'that' are incorrectly used here. We say 'buy shoes for my body' to indicate purpose, and 'on any occasions' is correct, but 'that those times' should be 'at those times' to indicate specific times.

× I haven't bought any kind of shoes from online because I find most of the website selling shoes fraud.

✓ I haven't bought any kind of shoes online because I find most of the websites selling shoes fraudulent.

The preposition 'from' is unnecessary before 'online'. Also, 'website' should be plural 'websites' to match 'most of the', and 'fraud' should be 'fraudulent' as an adjective describing the websites.

× Even I have a example where my one of the closest friend got ex scammed by one of the social media sue sailor after she had paid her money to buy one of shoes from there.

✓ I even have an example where one of my closest friends was scammed by a social media seller after she had paid money to buy a pair of shoes from there.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'a example' should be 'an example' (article error), 'my one of the closest friend' should be 'one of my closest friends' (sentence structure and article), 'got ex scammed' should be 'was scammed' (verb tense and word choice), 'sue sailor' is incorrect and should be 'seller' (word choice), and 'one of shoes' should be 'a pair of shoes' (quantifier and noun usage).

× I basically buy money whenever I am in very need of it or there are any special occasions such as dasa orthi have.

✓ I basically buy shoes whenever I am in very need of them or there are any special occasions such as Dasaorthi.

The phrase 'buy money' is incorrect; it should be 'buy shoes'. Also, 'in very need' should be 'in great need' or 'in need'. 'Dasa orthi have' seems to be a misspelling or mishearing of 'Dasaorthi', a festival name, which should be capitalized and corrected. 'Them' is used to refer to shoes (plural pronoun).

× I try to buy a formal shoes.

✓ I try to buy formal shoes.

The article 'a' is incorrect before the plural noun 'shoes'. We do not use 'a' with plural nouns.

× If if he's the condition is other related to wear casually or or I am in need of just for the sports, I buy casual suit.

✓ If the condition is related to wearing casual clothes or if I need shoes just for sports, I buy casual shoes.

The sentence has pronoun errors: 'he's' is incorrect and unnecessary, 'wear casually' should be 'wearing casual clothes', 'casual suit' should be 'casual shoes' to match the context. Also, the sentence structure is corrected for clarity.