鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific supporting details using linking words to improve coherence. Avoid redundancy and awkward phrasing.

示例: I don't like buying shoes very often. In fact, I only buy them occasionally, maybe once every few years, because I already have three or four pairs that I use regularly.

建议: Use correct tense and grammar to make your answer clearer. Begin with a direct response, then add specific details using linking words. Avoid vague words like 'often' when referring to a single experience.

示例: Yes, I bought shoes online from Amazon when I was 18. It was a good experience because the shoes were of good quality and arrived on time.

建议: Make your answer more natural and structured. Start with a clear statement, then explain with specific reasons or examples using linking words. Avoid awkward phrases and repetition.

示例: I usually don't spend much money on shoes because I prefer to save. Since I don't buy shoes often, I only purchase them when absolutely necessary.

建议: Provide a clear preference with reasons and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like 'more much more comfortable to us'.

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes because they feel better when I wear them. Although fashionable shoes look nice, comfort is more important to me than impressing others.

× No, I don't like to buy much more shoes and I only buy shoes on very rare cases occasionally and I only have 3 or 4 pairs of shoes.

✓ No, I don't like to buy many shoes and I only buy shoes on very rare occasions and I only have 3 or 4 pairs of shoes.

The phrase 'much more shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is a countable noun and should be quantified with 'many' instead of 'much'. Also, 'very rare cases occasionally' is redundant and awkward; 'very rare occasions' is the correct expression. Use 'many' for countable nouns and avoid redundant adverbs for clarity.

× Yes, I had once bought shoes online from Amazon website when I was 18 years old and that was a good experience and the quality of that shoes were often good.

✓ Yes, I once bought shoes online from the Amazon website when I was 18 years old and that was a good experience and the quality of those shoes was often good.

The past perfect 'had bought' is unnecessary here; simple past 'bought' is appropriate. 'That shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and requires 'those' as a demonstrative adjective. Also, 'quality ... were' is incorrect; 'quality' is singular and should be followed by 'was'. Use simple past for completed actions and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× I don't basically spend much more money on buying shoes. Rather, I do save money and spend it very, very necessarily required. And I often don't buy many shoes.

✓ I don't basically spend much money on buying shoes. Rather, I save money and spend it only when very necessary. And I often don't buy many shoes.

'Much more money' is incorrect here; 'much money' suffices as a quantifier. The phrase 'spend it very, very necessarily required' is ungrammatical; it should be 'spend it only when very necessary' to express necessity properly. Simplify and clarify quantifiers and adverbs for better understanding.

× I do prefer comfortable shoes personally as they feel more much more comfortable to us rather than being shown to others.

✓ I personally prefer comfortable shoes as they feel much more comfortable to me rather than being worn to show others.

The pronoun 'us' is incorrect here because the speaker is referring to themselves; 'me' is appropriate. The phrase 'more much more comfortable' is redundant; 'much more comfortable' is correct. Also, 'being shown to others' is awkward; 'being worn to show others' better conveys the intended meaning. Use correct pronouns and avoid redundancy for clarity.