鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không chính xác và câu dài dòng. Hãy sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó giải thích lý do một cách cụ thể và có liên kết logic giữa các câu.

示例: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I don't do it often because I prefer to buy high-quality ones. Therefore, I usually save money for several months to buy an expensive pair. I avoid cheap shoes because they don't last long.

建议: Bạn cần cải thiện ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt để câu trả lời tự nhiên và dễ hiểu hơn. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để kết nối ý và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn về trải nghiệm mua sắm trực tuyến.

示例: Yes, I have bought shoes online about 15% of the time. Buying online allows me to see many trendy styles and colors. Also, I can check how models wear them, which helps me decide. Moreover, the prices are often reasonable.

建议: Bạn nên sử dụng cấu trúc câu chính xác và tránh lặp từ. Hãy nói rõ số tiền bạn chi tiêu và giải thích lý do một cách cụ thể, sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp với ngữ cảnh.

示例: I usually spend between 300,000 and 700,000 VND on shoes. However, if I find a pair I really like, I save up between 1,000,000 and 2,000,000 VND to buy them because they are special to me.

建议: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng cần cải thiện sự mạch lạc và ngữ pháp. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để kết nối ý và diễn đạt rõ ràng hơn về sở thích của bạn.

示例: In my opinion, I prefer comfortable shoes, but I also like to mix in some fashionable styles. As a fashion designer, I enjoy trying different types of shoes, but comfort is my top priority since I work all day.

× Yes, I like buying shoes but I'm not often uh because I have a habit that buy should depend on the quality.

✓ Yes, I like buying shoes but I don't often because I have a habit that buying should depend on the quality.

The modal verb 'do' is missing in the negative sentence 'I'm not often'. It should be 'I don't often'. Also, 'buy' should be in gerund form 'buying' after 'habit that'. This corrects the modal verb usage and verb form.

× So I save money to buy expensive one for four months a year.

✓ So I save money to buy an expensive one every four months a year.

The phrase 'for four months a year' is incorrect; it should be 'every four months a year' to indicate frequency. Also, 'expensive one' needs an article 'an' before it.

× I not like to buy cheap quality of shoes.

✓ I do not like to buy cheap quality shoes.

The auxiliary verb 'do' is missing in the negative sentence. Also, 'cheap quality of shoes' is incorrect; it should be 'cheap quality shoes' without 'of'.

× Yes, I have about 15%.

✓ Yes, I have bought about 15%.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks the past participle verb 'bought' after 'have' to form present perfect tense.

× When you buying them online you can see the trend many type of shoes that you want the color and use the model wearing.

✓ When you buy them online, you can see the trend, many types of shoes that you want, the color, and use the model wearing them.

The verb 'buying' should be in base form 'buy' after 'when you'. Also, 'many type' should be 'many types' (plural). The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× Trying them to you decide what you want and the price is good.

✓ Trying them helps you decide what you want and the price is good.

The sentence lacks a subject and verb agreement. 'Trying them' should be the subject followed by a verb like 'helps' to complete the sentence.

× They usually spending on between 300,000 to 700,000 down to buying shoe.

✓ I usually spend between 300,000 to 700,000 on buying shoes.

The subject 'They' is incorrect; it should be 'I'. The verb 'spending' should be 'spend' to match the present tense. Also, 'down to buying shoe' is incorrect and removed for clarity.

× But sometimes when I see the favorite shoe that I really want to have, I save money between 1,000,000 thousand to 2,000,000 thousand to buy one that I'd really like and I want to try.

✓ But sometimes when I see my favorite shoes that I really want to have, I save money between 1,000,000 to 2,000,000 to buy one that I'd really like and want to try.

'Favorite shoe' should be plural 'favorite shoes' if referring generally. Also, '1,000,000 thousand' is redundant; it should be '1,000,000'. The sentence is simplified for clarity.

× In my opinion I prefer comfortable shoes but mixing some trending or fashionable because as a fashion designer I really want to try many type of shoe but the comfortable is the first thing I really choose to work all day.

✓ In my opinion, I prefer comfortable shoes but mix in some trending or fashionable ones because, as a fashion designer, I really want to try many types of shoes, but comfort is the first thing I choose for working all day.

The sentence has incorrect conjunction use and verb forms. 'Mixing' should be 'mix in'. 'Many type' should be 'many types'. 'The comfortable' should be 'comfort'. Commas are added for clarity.