鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using correct grammar and vocabulary. Avoid redundancy and irrelevant information.

示例: Yes, I like buying shoes quite often. Recently, I bought a pair of sports shoes because I enjoy running. I usually buy shoes every few months depending on my needs.

建议: Your answer addresses the question but could be more natural and concise. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar for clarity.

示例: I have tried buying shoes online once, but the size was too big, so I returned them. Since then, I prefer buying shoes in physical stores to ensure the right fit.

建议: Your answer is clear but could be improved by adding more specific details and using linking words to make it more coherent.

示例: I usually spend between 10 and 20 rials on shoes every four months. This amount allows me to buy good quality shoes that last a long time.

建议: Your answer needs to be more structured and grammatically correct. Start with a clear preference, then explain your reasons using linking words for coherence.

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I work long hours and need shoes that help me feel relaxed. Although fashionable shoes like heels look nice, they are not practical for my daily activities.

× Yes, I buy a lot of shoes for me the last one I was born.

✓ Yes, I buy a lot of shoes for myself; the last one I bought was when I was born.

The pronoun 'me' is incorrectly used instead of the reflexive pronoun 'myself' to indicate the subject is both the doer and receiver of the action. Also, the sentence structure is unclear and needs rephrasing for clarity.

× Shoes it's for sport shoes, I think it's uh, 10A real money.

✓ The shoes are for sports; I think they cost about 10 rials.

The sentence is fragmented and contains unclear phrases like '10A real money'. It needs restructuring for clarity and correct verb usage.

× Actually I didn't buy online shoes, I try only once time, but the shoes became bigger, it's not my size.

✓ Actually, I haven't bought shoes online; I tried only once, but the shoes were too big and not my size.

The verb 'try' should be in past tense 'tried' to match the past action. 'Became bigger' is incorrect; 'were too big' is appropriate. Also, 'didn't buy online shoes' is better expressed as 'haven't bought shoes online' for clarity.

× So after that I didn't do that and I buy it on the shop only.

✓ So after that, I didn't do that again and only buy shoes in shops.

The verb 'buy' should be in present tense 'buy' to indicate habitual action, but the sentence needs clearer structure. 'On the shop' is incorrect preposition usage; 'in shops' is correct.

× I spend a lot of money to buy shoes, approximately from 10 to 20 rials every four months.

✓ I spend a lot of money buying shoes, approximately 10 to 20 rials every four months.

The phrase 'spend a lot of money to buy' is better expressed as 'spend a lot of money buying'. The preposition 'from' is unnecessary before '10 to 20 rials'.

× Often Lee I prefer a comfortable shoes because I work more and I need some shoes feeling relaxed when I wearing.

✓ Often, I prefer comfortable shoes because I work a lot and need shoes that feel comfortable when I wear them.

'A comfortable shoes' is incorrect; 'comfortable shoes' (plural without article) is correct. 'Some shoes feeling relaxed' is incorrect; it should be 'shoes that feel comfortable'. 'When I wearing' should be 'when I wear'.

× However, fashionable shoes like heels, I can't work more and.

✓ However, I can't work much when wearing fashionable shoes like heels.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks proper structure. It needs to be rephrased to clearly express the idea that wearing heels limits work ability.