鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to use correct expressions and grammar, such as 'interested in' instead of 'interesting about'. Also, organise your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, avoiding filler words like 'uh'.

示例: I don't particularly enjoy buying shoes, and I only own about four pairs. For example, I have one pair for school, one pair of beach sandals for summer, and others for winter.

建议: Focus on clarity and correct grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, be specific about the problem you faced when buying shoes online.

示例: Yes, I have bought shoes online once, but it was disappointing because I ordered size 24.5 cm, yet the shoes I received were much smaller and did not fit at all.

建议: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and provide clear reasons for your spending habits.

示例: I usually spend between ¥2000 and ¥3000 on shoes because I don't care much about the design or brand. I think this price range offers the best value for me.

建议: Work on sentence clarity and grammar. Use linking words to explain your preference clearly and provide specific reasons.

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes because when I walk long distances, uncomfortable shoes make my feet swell and cause fatigue. Therefore, comfort is more important to me than fashion.

× Honestly I'm not really interesting about shoes but I have maybe 4 shoes.

✓ Honestly, I'm not really interested in shoes but I have maybe 4 pairs of shoes.

The adjective 'interesting' is incorrectly used instead of the past participle adjective 'interested' to describe the speaker's feeling. Also, 'about' should be replaced with 'in' after 'interested'. Additionally, '4 shoes' is better expressed as '4 pairs of shoes' to indicate quantity correctly.

× One is for school, 1 is like beach sandal tours.

✓ One is for school, one is like beach sandals for tours.

The word 'sandal' should be plural 'sandals' to match the context. Also, '1' should be written as 'one' for consistency. The phrase 'beach sandal tours' is unclear; adding 'for' clarifies the purpose.

× Uh summer and winters.

✓ Uh, summer and winter.

The phrase lacks a verb or proper structure, making it a fragment. Adding a comma and correcting 'winters' to singular 'winter' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yeah, I have only once, but it's not good because the shoes I wearing 224.5cm but I bought it, but the real 1 is totally different, it's so small.

✓ Yeah, I have only bought once, but it wasn't good because the shoes I was wearing were 24.5 cm but I bought them, but the real ones are totally different; they're so small.

The phrase 'I have only once' is incomplete; it should be 'I have only bought once'. 'I wearing' is incorrect; it should be 'I was wearing'. The measurement '224.5cm' seems a typo and is corrected to '24.5 cm'. 'The real 1' should be 'the real ones' to match plural. Also, pronouns and verb tenses are corrected for clarity.

× I don't care about like design or like brand.

✓ I don't care about design or brand.

The use of 'like' before 'design' and 'brand' is unnecessary and incorrect in this context. Removing 'like' makes the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.

× So I spend maybe ¥5000 it's yeah, but I usually spend 2000 to ¥3000.

✓ So I spend maybe ¥5000, yeah, but I usually spend ¥2000 to ¥3000.

The sentence lacks proper punctuation and currency symbol before '2000'. Adding commas and the currency symbol improves readability and correctness.

× It's best price.

✓ It's the best price.

The sentence is missing the definite article 'the' before 'best price' to specify the noun correctly.

× I choose comfortable shoes because when I work nearly long distance it's so hard like there's no no fit or I don't want to get tired and every time when I learning or long distance I'm swelling so I don't want.

✓ I choose comfortable shoes because when I work long distances, it's so hard; there's no fit, and I don't want to get tired. Every time when I am learning or walking long distances, I swell, so I don't want that.

The sentence is a run-on with multiple errors: 'nearly long distance' is incorrect, corrected to 'long distances'; 'no no fit' is a repetition and unclear, corrected to 'no fit'; 'when I learning' lacks auxiliary verb, corrected to 'when I am learning'; 'I'm swelling' is corrected to 'I swell' for clarity. The sentence is split for better structure and clarity.