鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时时态混乱，表达不够自然且重复较多。建议使用简单明了的句子，保持时态一致，并避免重复。

示例: I used to like buying shoes when I was young. I would buy a new pair every month, including different styles like trainers and high heels. I especially liked high heels.

建议: 回答较为连贯，但句子结构不完整，表达不够清晰。建议使用完整句子，并适当使用连接词使表达更流畅。

示例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because I am a mother now and don't have enough time to visit malls. It saves time, and I can easily search for trainers online.

建议: 回答中有重复和口语填充词，表达不够具体。建议减少重复，使用更具体的描述，并避免口语化的填充词。

示例: I usually spend about 200 RMB each month on shoes for myself or my daughter. The amount depends on the season and my mood.

建议: 表达不清晰，有语法错误和不连贯的句子。建议使用完整句子，明确表达观点，并避免语法错误。

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes, especially since I became a mother. I need shoes that allow me to move easily because I often carry my daughter, so I don't wear high heels every day.

× I like buying shoes when I was young, every month I will, I would, I, I, I bought a pair of shoes and that's very different, different, uh, styles, like some, uh, trainers, high high heels.

✓ I liked buying shoes when I was young. Every month, I would buy a pair of shoes, and they were very different styles, like trainers and high heels.

这里的时间是过去，所以动词需要用过去时态。原句中“I like buying shoes when I was young”时态不一致，应改为“I liked buying shoes when I was young”。另外，“every month I will, I would”表达混乱，应统一用过去时“would”表示过去习惯。

× Yes, I bought shoes online always because I'm a mum now so I don't have enough time to go to the mall and to try a lot of shoes and I think it's very uh, waste time.

✓ Yes, I always buy shoes online because I'm a mum now, so I don't have enough time to go to the mall and try on a lot of shoes, and I think it's a waste of time.

“bought shoes online always”中副词位置不正确，应为“always buy shoes online”。“try a lot of shoes”应为“try on a lot of shoes”，因为“try on”是固定搭配，表示试穿。

× Maybe, uh, every month I would spend 200 RMB to buy my, buy the shoes for, for me or for my daughter.

✓ Maybe every month I spend 200 RMB to buy shoes for myself or my daughter.

这里描述的是现在的习惯，应该用一般现在时“spend”，而不是过去时“would spend”。

× I like comfortable shoes, especially when I become a mom. I need to consider the comfortable uh because I need hug my daughter so I cannot take the high heels every day.

✓ I like comfortable shoes, especially since I became a mom. I need to consider comfort because I need to hug my daughter, so I cannot wear high heels every day.

“consider the comfortable”中“comfortable”应为名词“comfort”。“need hug my daughter”缺少介词“to”，应为“need to hug my daughter”。“take the high heels”用词不当，应为“wear high heels”。

× I need to boil some.

✓ I need to wear some.

“boil”意思是“煮”，与穿鞋无关，应该是“wear”，表示穿鞋。