鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to use correct grammar and sentence structure to make your answer clearer. Avoid repetition and unnecessary fillers like 'uh'. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain your preference with reasons.

示例: Yes, I like buying shoes occasionally, usually once a year when I need a new pair. I prefer quality over quantity because comfortable shoes are important to me. Therefore, I always choose shoes that feel good and last long.

建议: Focus on clear and grammatically correct sentences. Avoid filler words like 'uh'. Use linking words to explain your experience logically. Also, be specific about your dissatisfaction to make your answer more effective.

示例: Yes, I have bought shoes online, but I was not satisfied because the size I received was different from what I ordered. Therefore, I prefer not to buy shoes online to avoid such problems.

建议: Make your answer more precise and grammatically correct. Avoid filler sounds and clarify the currency or amount you spend. Use linking words to explain your reason clearly.

示例: I usually spend about 5000 rupees on shoes because I value comfort and quality over quantity. Hence, I prefer to invest in good shoes that last longer.

建议: Try to avoid filler words and make your sentences more fluent. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide a clear reason for your preference.

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes because when I am running or walking, I want to feel good and avoid any foot injuries. Therefore, comfort is more important to me than fashion.

× Yes, occasionally I buying, I like to buy a shoes in every year when I want a new pair of shoes.

✓ Yes, occasionally I buy, I like to buy shoes every year when I want a new pair of shoes.

The verb 'buying' is incorrectly used here; it should be the base form 'buy' after 'I'. Also, 'a shoes' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and does not take 'a'. The correct phrase is 'buy shoes'.

× Yes, occasionally I buying, I like to buy a shoes in every year when I want a new pair of shoes.

✓ Yes, occasionally I buy, I like to buy shoes every year when I want a new pair of shoes.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before the plural noun 'shoes'. Plural nouns do not take the indefinite article 'a'.

× Yes, occasionally I buying, I like to buy a shoes in every year when I want a new pair of shoes.

✓ Yes, occasionally I buy, I like to buy shoes every year when I want a new pair of shoes.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used with 'every year'. The correct preposition is omitted; the phrase should be 'every year' without 'in'.

× Uh, I see, I see quality, not a quantity because it's feels comfortable.

✓ Uh, I see quality, not quantity because it feels comfortable.

The phrase 'a quantity' is incorrect here; 'quantity' is uncountable and does not take 'a'. Also, 'it's feels' is incorrect; it should be 'it feels'.

× Uh, I see, I see quality, not a quantity because it's feels comfortable.

✓ Uh, I see quality, not quantity because it feels comfortable.

The verb 'feels' should agree with the singular subject 'it'. The phrase 'it's feels' is incorrect; it should be 'it feels'.

× I want to feel comfortable and good in the shoes.

✓ I want to feel comfortable and good in my shoes.

The pronoun 'the' is less appropriate here; 'my shoes' specifies possession and is more natural in this context.

× Yes, I bought shoes online, uh, but I'm not that kind of satisfaction I want, but uh, I don't believe in that because, uh, before, before a month, I ordered a shoes, but that size is not my, what I ordered.

✓ Yes, I bought shoes online, uh, but I'm not satisfied in the way I want, and I don't believe in it because, uh, a month ago, I ordered shoes, but the size was not what I ordered.

The phrase 'a shoes' is incorrect; 'shoes' is plural and does not take 'a'. Also, 'before a month' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'a month ago'. The sentence structure and word choice are improved for clarity.

× Yes, I bought shoes online, uh, but I'm not that kind of satisfaction I want, but uh, I don't believe in that because, uh, before, before a month, I ordered a shoes, but that size is not my, what I ordered.

✓ Yes, I bought shoes online, uh, but I was not satisfied as I wanted, and I don't believe in it because, uh, a month ago, I ordered shoes, but the size was not what I ordered.

The tense is inconsistent; 'is not' should be 'was not' to match the past context. Also, 'I'm not that kind of satisfaction I want' is incorrect; it should be 'I was not satisfied as I wanted'.

× That's why I don't prefer to bought a shoes.

✓ That's why I don't prefer to buy shoes.

The verb after 'prefer to' should be in base form 'buy', not past tense 'bought'. Also, 'a shoes' is incorrect; 'shoes' is plural and does not take 'a'.

× I spend money on my shoes, usually UH-5 about 5000.

✓ I usually spend about 5000 on my shoes.

The phrase 'UH-5 about 5000' is unclear and awkward. The quantifier 'about' should precede the amount. Also, 'I spend money on my shoes' is better expressed as 'I usually spend about 5000 on my shoes'.

× Uh, because I feel comfortable because I see quality, not a quantity.

✓ Because I feel comfortable, I look for quality, not quantity.

The phrase 'I see quality' is awkward; 'look for quality' is more appropriate. Also, 'a quantity' is incorrect; 'quantity' is uncountable and does not take 'a'.

× That's why in invested in shoes most probably.

✓ That's why I invest in shoes most of the time.

The phrase 'in invested' is incorrect; it should be 'I invest'. Also, 'most probably' is not appropriate here; 'most of the time' fits better.

× I prefer comfortable shoes because when I'm, uh, when I'm running, walking, I want to feel good and I don't want any injury in my foot.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because when I'm running or walking, I want to feel good and not get any injury in my foot.

The conjunction 'and' between 'running' and 'walking' is better replaced with 'or' to indicate either activity. Also, 'I don't want any injury in my foot' is better expressed as 'not get any injury in my foot'.