鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答が不自然で冗長な表現が多いです。質問に直接答え、なぜ靴を買うのが好きかを簡潔に説明しましょう。例えば、頻度についても触れると良いです。

示例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes quite often because I find them essential for my daily life and like to keep my style updated.

建议: 文法の誤りと冗長な表現があります。理由を明確にし、論理的に話をつなげるために接続詞を使いましょう。

示例: I haven't bought shoes online because I am unsure if they will fit me properly, as sizes can vary even for the same number.

建议: 回答が曖昧で繰り返しが多いです。通常の価格帯と特別な例を明確に分けて話し、具体的な金額や理由を述べると良いです。

示例: Usually, I spend a moderate amount on shoes, but recently I bought a very fashionable and expensive pair that I really like.

建议: 内容は良いですが、語彙の繰り返しを避け、より自然な表現を使いましょう。また、接続詞を使って文を滑らかに繋げると良いです。

示例: I like both fashionable and comfortable shoes because fashionable ones match various outfits, while comfortable shoes are ideal for activities like walking and sports.

× I really like buying shoes because I think my shoes are a really great invention and I really, really, really essential thing.

✓ I really like buying shoes because I think my shoes are a really great invention and a really, really, really essential thing.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'really essential thing' which is singular. In English, singular countable nouns require an article or determiner.

× Not really because I didn't really know if the shoes matches my feet and there are some shoes that it's quite small for my feet even if it's the same size so.

✓ Not really because I didn't really know if the shoes match my feet and there are some shoes that are quite small for my feet even if they're the same size.

The verb 'matches' should be 'match' to agree with the plural subject 'shoes'. Also, 'it's' should be 'they're' to agree with the plural noun 'shoes'.

× I spend like our normal price on my shoes, but once I mean the one that I'm using right now is a really expensive 1.

✓ I spend like our normal price on my shoes, but the one that I'm using right now is really expensive.

The phrase 'once I mean the one' is unclear and '1' should be 'one'. Also, 'really expensive 1' is incorrect; 'really expensive one' is correct, but better to rephrase for clarity.

× So it is a really, really, really fashionable 1 and I really like it.

✓ So it is a really, really, really fashionable one and I really like it.

The numeral '1' should be spelled out as 'one' in this context.

× I really like both because I think that fashionable fashionable shoes have their own merits, like it goes with any kinds of clothes.

✓ I really like both because I think that fashionable shoes have their own merits, like they go with any kind of clothes.

The phrase 'any kinds of clothes' is incorrect; 'any kind of clothes' is correct. Also, 'it goes' should be 'they go' to agree with plural 'shoes'.

× But comfortable shoes are good for walking or running and doing sports. So I have the two pairs of each one.

✓ But comfortable shoes are good for walking, running, and doing sports. So I have two pairs of each.

The phrase 'the two pairs of each one' is incorrect; 'two pairs of each' is correct. Also, listing activities should be parallel and separated by commas.