鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Avoid grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words. For example, explain how often you buy shoes and why you like special shoes.

示例: Yes, I really enjoy buying shoes. I usually buy new shoes every few months because I like to have unique styles that express my personality. Moreover, wearing different shoes can change my mood depending on the occasion.

建议: Your answer is understandable but needs better grammar and linking words to improve coherence. Try to use correct verb tenses and connect your ideas smoothly. Also, be more specific about your buying habits.

示例: Yes, I have bought shoes online many times because the prices are often cheaper than in physical stores. Usually, I try the shoes in a store first, and if I like them, I buy them online to save money.

建议: Your answer needs clearer structure and more precise vocabulary. Avoid repetition and use linking words to explain your spending habits. Also, clarify currency and price ranges.

示例: I usually spend around 5,000 pesos on shoes because they have become quite expensive recently. For example, regular shoes cost about 4,000 pesos, but branded shoes like Adidas can cost up to 5,000 pesos.

建议: Your answer has some repetition and awkward phrasing. Try to express your opinion clearly with correct grammar and avoid repeating words. Use linking words to explain your reasons.

示例: I prefer fashionable shoes over comfortable ones because I believe style is more important to me. Although they might not be very comfortable, fashionable shoes help me express my personal style and improve my mood.

× Actually, I'm one of a shoes lover.

✓ Actually, I'm one of the shoe lovers.

The phrase 'one of a shoes lover' is incorrect because 'shoes' is plural and 'lover' is singular. The correct phrase is 'one of the shoe lovers' where 'shoe' is singular adjective modifying 'lovers' plural noun. Also, the article 'a' should be 'the' in this expression.

× because she's really represent my fashion and it really changes my mood depending on what youth I wear in a day.

✓ because they really represent my fashion and they really change my mood depending on what shoes I wear in a day.

The pronoun 'she's' is incorrect when referring to 'shoes' which is plural and non-human. The correct pronoun is 'they'. Also, 'youth' is a typo and should be 'shoes'. The verbs should agree with plural subject 'they'.

× Umm, I have bought shoes online.

✓ Umm, I have bought shoes online.

This sentence is grammatically correct. 'Have bought' is the present perfect tense appropriate for the question about past experience.

× A lot of time when the price of shoes in online are cheaper than in offline.

✓ A lot of times when the price of shoes online is cheaper than offline.

The phrase 'A lot of time' should be 'A lot of times' to indicate frequency. Also, 'in online' and 'in offline' are incorrect prepositional uses; 'online' and 'offline' function as adverbs here without 'in'. The verb 'are' should be 'is' because 'price' is singular.

× And I usually try the shoes in offline and then buy it in online that is more affordable.

✓ And I usually try the shoes offline and then buy them online because it is more affordable.

The prepositions 'in offline' and 'in online' are incorrect. 'Offline' and 'online' are used without prepositions here. Also, 'it' should be 'them' referring to 'shoes' plural.

× The most shoes normal price is about 4K and what I wanted to buy in brands like Adidas they are 5K.

✓ Most shoes' normal price is about 4K, and the ones I want to buy from brands like Adidas are 5K.

The phrase 'The most shoes normal price' is incorrect; it should be 'Most shoes' normal price' with possessive apostrophe. 'What I wanted to buy' should be 'the ones I want to buy' to refer to shoes. Also, 'in brands' should be 'from brands'. Verb agreement corrected to 'are' for plural.

× I don't really think comfortable comfortability is really matter for me.

✓ I don't really think comfort is really important for me.

'Comfortable comfortability' is redundant and incorrect. 'Comfort' is the correct noun. Also, 'matter' should be 'important' to fit the sentence meaning.

× Even though it is not comfortable, I like fashionable shoes to represent my personal styles and change my mood.

✓ Even though they are not comfortable, I like fashionable shoes to represent my personal style and change my mood.

'It' should be 'they' referring to 'shoes' plural. 'Personal styles' should be singular 'personal style' to refer to one's overall style.