鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question first, then provide specific reasons with clear sentence structure. Avoid vague phrases and incomplete sentences.

示例: Yes, I like buying shoes quite often because I wear different types of clothes. For example, I prefer sandals and slippers as they complement my outfits and enhance my personality.

建议: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details about your experience. Also, try to avoid repetition and incomplete sentences.

示例: Yes, I bought shoes online last year from a website called Shein. The shoes looked amazing on the website, but when I received the parcel and tried them on, they did not fit my feet well.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. Try to directly state how much you spend, then explain with specific examples. Use correct vocabulary and sentence structure to make your answer understandable.

示例: I usually spend a moderate amount of money on shoes, especially when I need formal shoes to match my suits. Sometimes, I also buy hiking shoes for outdoor activities.

建议: Your answer has good ideas but needs clearer expression and better grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain your preference with reasons and examples, using linking words for coherence.

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes because they allow me to walk easily and move around without pain. Although fashionable shoes look nice, they are often uncomfortable and not worth the money.

× Honestly speaking at present Asia like to buy shoes because I usually wear different kind of dresses so I prefer sandals, normal slippers because it enhances my. Personality.

✓ Honestly speaking, at present Asians like to buy shoes because I usually wear different kinds of dresses, so I prefer sandals and normal slippers because they enhance my personality.

The word 'Asia' should be 'Asians' to refer to people, which is plural. 'Different kind' should be 'different kinds' to match plural 'dresses'. 'Sandals, normal slippers' should be connected properly with 'and'. 'It enhances my personality' should be 'they enhance my personality' because the subject is plural (sandals and slippers). These corrections fix singular/plural agreement issues.

× Yes, I still remember last year I bought shoes through Sheen. Then I saw shoes on the website. It looks very amazing, but after when I bought the parcel, when I after that, I tried but it's uh didn't fit on my feet as well as it's not.

✓ Yes, I still remember last year I bought shoes through Shein. Then I saw shoes on the website. They looked very amazing, but after I received the parcel and tried them on, they didn't fit my feet well and were not comfortable.

The sentence has tense inconsistency and awkward phrasing. 'It looks' should be 'They looked' to agree with plural 'shoes' and past tense. 'After when I bought the parcel, when I after that, I tried' is confusing; corrected to 'after I received the parcel and tried them on'. 'It's uh didn't fit' is incorrect; corrected to 'they didn't fit'. These corrections address past tense and verb form issues.

× Teams spend more money on shoes because I usually prefer than jumpy jooties with suits, so if ever I have a compulsion that time I have to buy shoes. Related the word for sometimes hiking shoes.

✓ I spend more money on shoes because I usually prefer to wear jumpy booties with suits, so if I ever have a need, I have to buy shoes. Sometimes I also buy hiking shoes.

'Teams' is incorrect; should be 'I'. 'Prefer than jumpy jooties' is incorrect; corrected to 'prefer to wear jumpy booties'. 'Compulsion' is awkward; 'need' is better. 'Related the word for sometimes hiking shoes' is unclear; corrected to 'Sometimes I also buy hiking shoes'. These fix singular/plural and sentence structure issues.

× Hunter Essence is comfortable shoes because I feel that if we wear a comfortable shoes so we can easily walk, we can easily here and there. We just focus on fashionable shoes but they didn't feel as comfort so it's just waste of money.

✓ Hunter Essence are comfortable shoes because I feel that if we wear comfortable shoes, we can easily walk here and there. We just focus on fashionable shoes, but they don't feel comfortable, so it's just a waste of money.

'Hunter Essence is comfortable shoes' should be 'Hunter Essence are comfortable shoes' to agree with plural 'shoes'. 'A comfortable shoes' should be 'comfortable shoes' without 'a'. 'We can easily here and there' is incomplete; corrected to 'we can easily walk here and there'. 'Didn't feel as comfort' should be 'don't feel comfortable'. 'It's just waste of money' needs article 'a'. These corrections fix adjective/adverb use and subject-verb agreement.