鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to give a clear and direct answer first, then add specific details. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm' to sound more natural and confident. For example, specify how often you buy shoes and why.

示例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and usually purchase new pairs about twice every two months because I like to keep my collection updated.

建议: Provide a clear reason with linking words to make your answer coherent. Avoid hesitation sounds and try to use more precise vocabulary.

示例: No, I have never bought shoes online because I find it difficult to choose the right size without trying them on first, so I prefer shopping in physical stores.

建议: Structure your answer clearly with a topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid repetition and hesitations. Also, clarify the currency and use linking words to connect ideas.

示例: I usually spend around 30,000 tingy on shoes, which I believe is a reasonable price. However, if I want more comfortable and stylish shoes, I am willing to pay more.

建议: Give a clear preference first, then explain your opinion using linking words. Avoid filler words and try to use a wider range of vocabulary.

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes, but I also value style. Therefore, I think it's important to choose shoes that are both comfortable and fashionable.

× I have a lot of pair of them.

✓ I have a lot of pairs of them.

The word 'pair' should be plural 'pairs' because it refers to multiple sets of shoes. When talking about more than one, the plural form is required.

× I buy them maybe, maybe. Twice, uh, in two months.

✓ I buy them maybe twice in two months.

The phrase 'maybe, maybe. Twice' is redundant and awkward. Simplifying to 'maybe twice' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Because, uh, I think shoes online are, are not, uh, will not be appropriate for my size and often I prefer to try them in real life.

✓ Because, uh, I think shoes online are not appropriate for my size and often I prefer to try them in real life.

The phrase 'are, are not, uh, will not be' is incorrect and confusing. Using 'are not' alone is sufficient and grammatically correct here.

× Usually I spend around 30,000 tingy on because I think it is uh.

✓ Usually I spend around 30,000 tingy because I think it is, uh,

The preposition 'on' is unnecessary after 'spend' when the amount is specified directly. Removing 'on' makes the sentence correct.

× It is appropriate cost for price for shoes uh, but if I will uh, if I want to buy more comfortable and stylish shoes, it will cost more.

✓ It is an appropriate price for shoes, but if I want to buy more comfortable and stylish shoes, it will cost more.

The phrase 'cost for price for shoes' is incorrect. 'Price' alone is sufficient, and 'an appropriate price' is the correct expression. Also, 'if I will' is incorrect; 'if I want' is correct.

× Personally, I prefer more comfortable shoes and stylish 1 umm but umm. But I think it is important to uh to choose be umm both comfortable, convenient and also stylish.

✓ Personally, I prefer more comfortable and stylish shoes, but I think it is important to choose both comfortable, convenient, and stylish ones.

The sentence has redundant conjunctions and unclear phrasing. Combining 'comfortable and stylish shoes' and using 'but' once improves clarity. Also, 'choose be umm both' is incorrect; it should be 'choose both'.