鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to give a clear and direct answer first, then add specific reasons or examples. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm' to sound more natural and confident. Also, keep your answer concise and organized.

示例: I don't buy shoes very often; usually, I purchase a new pair about once a year because my current shoes are still in good condition and last me a long time.

建议: Provide a clear and structured response by stating your experience directly, then explain why you bought the shoes online. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetition and filler words.

示例: Yes, I have bought shoes online once because they looked attractive and seemed comfortable. I needed them mainly for school and occasional outings.

建议: Be precise and clear with your answer. Avoid filler words and grammatical errors. Explain your opinion with specific reasons and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

示例: I usually spend between $10 and $20 on a pair of shoes. Although this might seem inexpensive, I believe affordable shoes can still be comfortable and stylish.

建议: Answer directly and clearly, then support your preference with specific reasons. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes because they allow me to have a good day at school or when hanging out with friends. Also, comfortable shoes are usually more affordable and still look stylish.

× Uh, no, I didn't uh, actually I rarely buy shoes, umm, every month.

✓ Uh, no, I didn't. Actually, I rarely buy shoes, umm, every month.

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks proper punctuation. Separating 'I didn't' and 'actually I rarely buy shoes' into two sentences clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× I often buy shoes one time a year because I think umm, my shoe is quite still new and I, I still use it for the year to go some.

✓ I often buy shoes once a year because I think my shoes are still quite new and I still use them throughout the year to go somewhere.

The word 'shoes' is plural, so 'my shoe' should be 'my shoes'. Also, 'one time a year' is better expressed as 'once a year'. 'Is' should be 'are' to agree with the plural subject 'shoes'. 'It' should be 'them' to refer to plural 'shoes'. 'To go some' is incomplete and corrected to 'to go somewhere'.

× Guess I have, I bought, umm, a pair of shoe on shop it up, uh, because it's look pretty and, umm, comfortable to wear and uh, I, I buy it.

✓ I guess I have. I bought a pair of shoes on Shop It Up because they look pretty and are comfortable to wear, and I bought them.

The phrase 'a pair of shoe' should be 'a pair of shoes' because 'pair' refers to two items. 'It's look' is incorrect; it should be 'they look' to agree with plural 'shoes'. Also, 'I buy it' is inconsistent with past tense and should be 'I bought them'.

× I bought it for my, uh, school for my, for my one time one year to go to school or where to go somewhere.

✓ I bought them for school to use for one year when I go to school or somewhere else.

The sentence is awkward and unclear. 'One time one year' is better expressed as 'for one year'. 'It' should be 'them' to refer to 'shoes'. The phrase 'or where to go somewhere' is corrected to 'or somewhere else' for clarity.

× Umm, well is around 10 to $20.00 for a pair of shoes.

✓ Umm, well, it is around $10 to $20 for a pair of shoes.

The original sentence lacks a subject. Adding 'it' clarifies the sentence. Also, the dollar sign should precede the number, and the range should be '$10 to $20'.

× Umm, I it is quite expensive, but I think uh, buying uh, inexpensive pay up shoes help me have a comfortable and stylish when I wear.

✓ Umm, it is quite expensive, but I think buying inexpensive shoes helps me be comfortable and stylish when I wear them.

The phrase 'I it is' is incorrect; 'it is' suffices. 'Pay up shoes' is unclear and likely incorrect; removed for clarity. 'Help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'buying'. 'Have a comfortable and stylish' is incomplete; corrected to 'be comfortable and stylish'. Added 'them' to refer to shoes.

× Well I prefer comfortable shoes because umm I don't like spending too much money on buying shoes.

✓ Well, I prefer comfortable shoes because I don't like spending too much money on buying shoes.

Added a comma after 'Well' for correct introductory phrase punctuation.

× I just think a comfortable shoe help me have a have a nice day with go to school or some hang out with friends.

✓ I just think a comfortable shoe helps me have a nice day when I go to school or hang out with friends.

'Help' should be 'helps' to agree with singular subject 'shoe'. Removed duplicate 'have a'. 'With go to school or some hang out' is incorrect; corrected to 'when I go to school or hang out'.

× And I think controversial is affordable and stylish.

✓ And I think comfortable shoes are affordable and stylish.

The word 'controversial' is incorrect in this context; likely intended 'comfortable'. Also, 'is' should be 'are' to agree with plural 'shoes'. Added 'shoes' for clarity.