鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“can not only shows”应为“can not only show”，“makes me look fashion”应为“makes me look fashionable”。此外，时间表达不清晰，“one 1 * 1 month”应明确为“once a month”。建议注意动词形式和时间表达的准确性。

示例: Yes, I like buying shoes online because it not only shows my personal style but also makes me look fashionable. I usually buy shoes about once a month.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和重复，如“more cheap”应为“cheaper”，“variable shoes”表达不准确，应为“various shoes”。句子结构混乱，建议简化句子并使用正确的比较级和词汇。

示例: Yes, I always buy shoes online because there are various shoes available, and they are cheaper than those in markets. Also, I have more choices to choose from.

建议: 句子结构不清晰，语法错误较多，如“Is although”不合适，时态混用。表达应更简洁明了，注意时态一致和句子连贯。

示例: Although I buy a lot of shoes, I usually spend little money on them because I spend a lot of time choosing cheap and convenient shoes, which helps me save money.

建议: 回答较为清晰，但“convenient is important”表达不准确，应为“comfort is important”。“fashion shoes”应为“fashionable shoes”。建议注意词汇的准确使用和句子流畅。

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them every day, so comfort is important to me. However, sometimes I also buy fashionable shoes when I want to look stylish.

× Yeah, I like buying shoes online 'cause it can not only shows my personal style but also makes me look fashion.

✓ Yeah, I like buying shoes online 'cause it can not only show my personal style but also make me look fashionable.

动词后接动名词时，助动词后动词应为原形。这里的 'can' 后面动词应为原形 'show' 和 'make'。另外，'look fashion' 应改为 'look fashionable'，因为 'look' 后面需要形容词形式。

× So I would buy shoes about one 1 * 1 month.

✓ So I would buy shoes about once a month.

表达频率时，'one 1 * 1 month' 不正确，应使用 'once a month' 来表示每月一次。

× Yeah, I always bought shoes online 'cause there are variable shoes online and they are more cheap than the shoes on on in markets and I can I have more choice to choose the shoes.

✓ Yeah, I always buy shoes online 'cause there are various shoes online and they are cheaper than the shoes in markets and I have more choices to choose from.

'always bought' 用过去时不符合习惯表达，应该用一般现在时 'always buy' 表示经常性动作。'variable shoes' 应改为 'various shoes' 表示多样的鞋子。'more cheap' 是错误的比较级，应为 'cheaper'。'on on in markets' 是重复错误，应为 'in markets'。'more choice' 应为复数 'more choices'，并且 'choose the shoes' 应改为 'choose from'。

× Is although I bought a lot of shoes, I just spent a little money on them 'cause I would spend a lot of time to choose the cheap and convenient shoes and that can save a lot of money.

✓ Although I have bought a lot of shoes, I just spend a little money on them because I spend a lot of time choosing cheap and convenient shoes, which can save a lot of money.

句子结构混乱，'Is although' 不正确，应直接用 'Although'。时态应统一，表达习惯用现在完成时 'have bought'。'would spend' 改为一般现在时 'spend'。'to choose' 改为动名词 'choosing'。'that can save' 指代不明，改为 'which can save'。

× I prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them every day, so convenient is important to me.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them every day, so comfort is important to me.

'convenient' 是形容词，不能直接作为主语，应该用名词 'comfort' 来表达舒适性的重要性。

× But sometimes I would also buy fashion shoes as when I want to make myself look stylish.

✓ But sometimes I also buy fashionable shoes when I want to make myself look stylish.

'fashion shoes' 应改为形容词形式 'fashionable shoes'。'would also buy' 改为一般现在时 'also buy' 更符合习惯表达。'as when' 多余，去掉 'as'。