鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 많으며, 중복된 표현이 있습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하고, 이유를 구체적으로 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

示例: Yes, I like buying shoes because they help me look fashionable. However, I don't buy shoes often because they are quite expensive.

建议: 답변이 다소 어색하고 'cost is essential' 같은 표현은 자연스럽지 않습니다. 더 자연스러운 표현과 연결어를 사용하여 문장을 명확하게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

示例: Yes, I have. About two years ago, I bought a pair of Adidas shoes online because the discounts were much better than in physical stores. Therefore, I usually buy shoes online when I find good deals.

建议: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문법 오류가 많습니다. 금액에 대해 구체적으로 말하고, 문장을 간결하고 정확하게 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

示例: I don't buy shoes often these days because of my budget. However, when I do, I usually spend around $50 on a pair.

建议: 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 많으며, 이유 설명이 불분명합니다. 선호를 명확히 하고, 이유를 구체적이고 자연스럽게 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

示例: When I was younger, I preferred fashionable shoes that were colorful and stylish. However, now I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because they are better for my foot health.

× Yes, I really like buying shoes because many shoes can make fashionable but unfortunately I think shoes cost so shoes cost is so high so I'm not often buy buy it.

✓ Yes, I really like buying shoes because many shoes can make me fashionable but unfortunately I think the cost of shoes is so high, so I don't often buy them.

The sentence has issues with plural forms and article usage. 'Many shoes can make fashionable' is incomplete; it should specify who is made fashionable. 'Shoes cost so shoes cost is so high' is repetitive and incorrect; it should be 'the cost of shoes is so high'. Also, 'I'm not often buy buy it' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'I don't often buy them'. Suggestions: specify the subject for 'make fashionable', use correct articles, and correct verb forms.

× Maybe two years ago I bought a pair of Adidas shoes online because the discounts were much better than offline stores.

✓ Maybe two years ago, I bought a pair of Adidas shoes online because the discounts were much better than in offline stores.

The sentence is mostly correct but missing the preposition 'in' before 'offline stores' to indicate location. This is a preposition issue rather than past tense, but since the instruction is to correct only grammar problem types listed, and preposition errors are type 11, this correction is necessary.

× So I usually buy shoes online when the cost is essential.

✓ So I usually buy shoes online when the cost is reasonable.

The phrase 'when the cost is essential' is incorrect; 'essential' is not appropriate here. It seems the intended meaning is 'when the cost is reasonable' or 'when the price is right'. This is a vocabulary choice issue but relates to adjective use (type 13). Suggest replacing 'essential' with 'reasonable' for clarity.

× These days I don't often buy shoes because I don't have enough money, so I'm not sure about that, but maybe people usually spend on shoes on $10 more and so do I.

✓ These days, I don't often buy shoes because I don't have enough money, so I'm not sure about that, but maybe people usually spend more than $10 on shoes, and so do I.

The phrase 'spend on shoes on $10 more' is incorrect. The correct structure is 'spend more than $10 on shoes'. Also, adding commas improves readability. Suggestions: correct the order of words and prepositions in spending expressions.

× When I was younger I prefer fashionable shoes like colourful and had some illustrate.

✓ When I was younger, I preferred fashionable shoes that were colorful and had some illustrations.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'I prefer' should be 'I preferred' to match 'When I was younger'. Also, 'like colourful and had some illustrate' is incomplete and incorrect; it should specify 'colorful' as an adjective and 'illustrations' as a noun. Suggestions: maintain consistent past tense and correct adjective and noun usage.

× But nowadays I prefer comfortable shoes absolutely because. Food health is really true.

✓ But nowadays, I absolutely prefer comfortable shoes because health is really important.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'because.' which is incomplete. 'Food health is really true' is unclear and incorrect. It likely means 'health is really important'. Also, 'absolutely' should be placed before the verb for correct adverb placement. Suggestions: complete the sentence after 'because', correct the phrase about health, and adjust adverb placement.