鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question first, then provide specific reasons. Use simpler sentence structures and avoid redundancy. For example, say how often you buy shoes and why.

示例: I don't buy shoes very often because I prefer to spend money on bags and clothes. Also, since I don't go out much, I don't need many pairs of shoes.

建议: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Also, be careful with verb tenses and plural forms.

示例: Yes, I bought shoes online once. They looked beautiful in the pictures, but when I received them, they were different from what I expected. Because of this, I decided not to buy shoes online again.

建议: Your answer is confusing and contains many grammatical errors. Try to answer directly with clear numbers and explain briefly. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

示例: I usually spend between 50 and 60 dollars per month on shoes. I don't buy many pairs, so I keep my spending within this range.

建议: Your answer is understandable but has grammar and word choice issues. Try to use linking words like 'sometimes' and 'if' correctly, and make your sentences more natural and concise.

示例: It depends on the occasion. Sometimes I prefer fashionable shoes when I dress formally, but for casual occasions, I choose comfortable shoes.

× How often I'm not usually buying shoes because I prefer to buy another thing such as the bags and the clothes because I'm not usually go out so I don't need to buy a lot amount of a lot quantity of shoes.

✓ I don't usually buy shoes often because I prefer to buy other things such as bags and clothes since I don't usually go out, so I don't need to buy a large quantity of shoes.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'I'm not usually buying' which is not the correct present tense form for habitual actions. The correct form is 'I don't usually buy'. Also, 'another thing' should be 'other things' to match plural objects, and 'a lot amount of a lot quantity' is redundant and incorrect; 'a large quantity' is appropriate.

× Yes I one time I buy a shoes through online I saw it, it was so beautiful but after bringing to my it is not like the same of the picture.

✓ Yes, one time I bought shoes online. I saw them; they were so beautiful, but after receiving them, they were not like the picture.

The verb 'buy' should be in the past tense 'bought' to match the past event. 'A shoes' is incorrect; 'shoes' is plural and does not need 'a'. 'Bringing to my' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'after receiving them'. Also, 'it is not like the same of the picture' is ungrammatical; the correct form is 'they were not like the picture'.

× So from this time I decided to never buy a shoes through online.

✓ So from that time, I decided never to buy shoes online again.

The phrase 'decided to never buy' is awkward; the correct form is 'decided never to buy'. Also, 'a shoes' is incorrect; 'shoes' is plural and does not need 'a'. 'Through online' should be 'online'.

× As a big amount of that I spent for buyer shoes a monthly it's between 50 to $60.00, not more than it because I'm not usually owing a lot of shoes just one time on one month.

✓ I usually spend between $50 to $60 per month on shoes, not more than that, because I don't usually own many shoes, just a few each month.

The phrase 'As a big amount of that I spent for buyer shoes a monthly' is ungrammatical and confusing. 'Owning' is the correct verb instead of 'owing'. 'A lot of shoes just one time on one month' is unclear; 'many shoes' or 'a few shoes each month' is better.

× It depends on the place that I will have to go to there.

✓ It depends on the place I have to go to.

The phrase 'go to there' is redundant; 'go to' already indicates direction, so 'there' is unnecessary.

× Sometime I prefer to wear fashionable shoes if I dress a very formal and if I wear casual I prefer to wear comfortable shoes rather than others.

✓ Sometimes I prefer to wear fashionable shoes if I dress very formally, and if I wear casual clothes, I prefer to wear comfortable shoes rather than others.

The adverb 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes'. 'Dress a very formal' is incorrect; it should be 'dress very formally'. 'If I wear casual' is incomplete; it should be 'if I wear casual clothes'.